Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 句子结构混乱，信息过多且重复。应先用一句话直接回答职业，然后用1–2句简洁地说明主要职责，注意语法和词汇搭配（例如：customer relations, project management, coordinate schedules/meetings, keep projects on track）。控制在不超过5句。

例: I'm a project manager. I handle customer relations and oversee project management. I also coordinate schedules and meetings to keep projects on track.

提案: 回答结构基本清晰，但有语法错误和冗余（"choose study" 应为 "chose to study" 或 "I study there because"）。可用一到两句补充具体地点或学习机构以增加信息量。使用连接词使表达更自然。

例: I study in my hometown, about 500 kilometres from the city where I live now. I chose to study there because my family is nearby, so it's more convenient for commuting.

提案: 开头不用用“But”。注意语法（如："it's a good place"，"the city is not very developed" 或意图相反需澄清）。细节具体但逻辑有点矛盾（说城市发达但教育差，要解释原因）。建议一句观点+一至两句原因并用连接词如"because"或"for example"。

例: No, I don't think it's a good place to study because the local education system is underdeveloped. For example, there are few resources and limited opportunities, so students struggle to get a high-quality education.

提案: 回答清晰且具体，但有小的语法问题和措辞不自然（如"the place where our study"应为"the place where I study"；"learning resource"用复数）。可略微精炼并保持例子与改进措施的一致性。

例: Yes. I would like the school to improve learning resources and provide higher-quality instruction. For example, a larger library and more practical workshops would give students more opportunities to practice and learn.

提案: 内容明确但语法和词汇错误较多（如"soft design"、"calling courses"、"practical coding"）。需要用正确短语表达学习方式（e.g. "software design", "online coding courses", "practice coding regularly"）。按一到两句目标再列出具体计划并使用连接词。

例: In the future I want to become a professional mobile app developer. To achieve that, I will study software design, take online coding courses, practice coding regularly and work on personal projects to build a strong portfolio.

× I work as a project manager and I'm responsible for the customer relations and project product management and I coordinate project schedulers and meetings to issue assisted on track.

✓ I work as a project manager. I'm responsible for customer relations and product management, and I coordinate project schedules and meetings to help keep things on track.

该句存在句子结构和主谓一致等问题（归类为“主谓一致/句子结构错误”）。原句过长且并列关系混乱，名词复数与单数使用不当（customer relations 可保留复数，project product management 表达重复且不自然），'project schedulers' 应为 'project schedules'（日程表而非日程安排者），'to issue assisted on track' 非标准表达，意为“帮助保持进度”，改为 'to help keep things on track'。建议将复杂信息分成短句，注意名词单复数和固定搭配。

× I study in my hometown, which is about 500 kilometers away from the city where I currently live. I choose study there because my family is nearby and it's more convenient for me to commute.

✓ I study in my hometown, which is about 500 kilometers away from the city where I currently live. I chose to study there because my family is nearby and it's more convenient for me to commute.

该句存在时态问题（现在时/过去时混用，应使用过去式表决定的原因），归类为“现在时/过去时问题”。原句 'I choose study there' 结构不正确且时态不一致，正确表达为 'I chose to study there'（过去做出的选择）或 'I choose to study there'（如果强调现在的选择）。同时 'choose study' 缺少不定式 'to'。建议注意决定发生时间并使用相应时态，动词后保留不定式。

× But no, I don't think it's good place to study because city now very developed and the education system is poor.

✓ No, I don't think it's a good place to study because the city is now very developed and the education system is poor.

该句存在时态和冠词及语序问题（归类为“现在时问题”和“冠词错误”）。需要使用 'a good place'（缺少不定冠词），'city now very developed' 应为 'the city is now very developed'（需要定冠词和系动词 is），语序应为主语+系动词+表语。建议在描述状态时使用正确的系动词和冠词。

× For example, there are few educational resources and opportunity for students, so it's hard to receive a high quality education.

✓ For example, there are few educational resources and opportunities for students, so it's hard to receive a high-quality education.

该句存在量词与可数名词的错误（归类为“量词使用不当”）及形容词连字符问题。'opportunity' 应为复数 'opportunities' 与前面的 'resources' 呼应；'high quality' 作复合形容词修饰 'education' 时建议用连字符 'high-quality'。建议注意可数名词单复数一致，并在复合形容词前使用连字符以提高清晰度。

× Yes, if the place where our study could make some changes, I would like them to improve the learning resource and provide higher quality instruction.

✓ Yes, if the place where I study could make some changes, I would like them to improve the learning resources and provide higher-quality instruction.

该句存在从句结构和代词使用问题（归类为“连接词/句子结构错误”与“代词使用错误”）。'the place where our study' 不自然，应该是 'the place where I study'；'learning resource' 应为复数 'learning resources'；'higher quality instruction' 最好用连字符 'higher-quality instruction'。建议使用正确的关系从句结构并确保代词与所属人一致，注意名词单复数。

× For example, a bigger library and more practical workshop would give students more opportunity to practice and learn.

✓ For example, a bigger library and more practical workshops would give students more opportunities to practice and learn.

该句存在可数名词与量词不一致问题（归类为“量词使用不当”）。'workshop' 应与 'a bigger library' 并列时使用复数 'workshops'（若指一般性增加），且 'more opportunity' 应为复数 'more opportunities'。建议在列举多项改进时保持名词数的一致性和复数形式。

× In the future, I want to be a professional mobile app developer, so I plan to read books and online articles about soft design and take calling courses to improve my technical skills.

✓ In the future, I want to be a professional mobile app developer, so I plan to read books and online articles about software design and take coding courses to improve my technical skills.

该句主要是词汇拼写与用法错误，归类为“将来时问题”不完全准确，但按指示只纠正列表内类型的错误，此处更接近词汇错误，仍给出改正。'soft design' 应为 'software design'，'calling courses' 显然为拼写或词选错误，应为 'coding courses'。句子时态 'I want ... I plan to' 使用正确，无需改动。建议注意专业词汇拼写并检查常见搭配。

× I will also practical coding regularly and work on personal project build a strong portfolio.

✓ I will also practice coding regularly and work on personal projects to build a strong portfolio.

该句存在动词+ -ing 形式和句子结构问题（归类为“动词+ -ing 形式”与“句子结构错误”）。'practical coding' 用词错误，应为动词 'practice coding'；'personal project build' 缺少不定式 'to' 或连接词并且 'project' 应为复数 'projects'（更符合上下文），改为 'work on personal projects to build a strong portfolio'。建议注意区分名词与动词形式，使用不定式表达目的，并保持名词单复数一致。