Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 在回答中要更直接地回应问题并注意语法与句子流畅度。避免冗长或重复，使用一到两句清晰表达身份，再简要说明所学课程和用途。注意冠词和并列连接词的使用，以及发音停顿减少。

例: I'm a university student majoring in e-commerce. I take compulsory courses like data analysis, supply chain management and UMM, which are very useful for my future career in online retail.

提案: 回答要注意冠词和所有格（school's library 或 the school library），並可加入一個連接詞使句子更自然。保持簡短且具體的原因細節以提升流暢度。

例: I usually study in the school library because everyone there is focused, and I prefer the quiet, peaceful atmosphere for concentrating.

提案: 句子結構混亂且語法錯誤較多，應用簡潔明確的主題句，然後用1-2句支持理由。注意時態、介詞和動詞形式（e.g. 'sitting' → 'sit' 或 'when I sit'）。減少填充詞如 'uh'。

例: Yes, it's a very good place for me. I find that when I sit in the library's quiet atmosphere I can concentrate better and get more work done.

提案: 回答內容合理但有重複（'better better'）及語法小錯誤。建議用更自然的連接詞和簡潔表達，如先明確回答 'No'，接著給出兩個具體原因。避免拖長停頓詞。

例: No, I wouldn't want it to change. I'm used to studying in the same place because it helps me keep a routine and maintain my concentration in a familiar environment.

提案: 回答方向正確但語法和用詞需改進。使用現在式表達計劃（'I plan to' 合適），改正 'was fond of' → 'am fond of'，並用更準確的詞語（'courses' 而非 'curricular'）。可加一句說明動機或期望成果以增加內容深度。

例: I plan to pursue a master's degree in data science next year because I am very fond of data analysis. I hope to deepen my skills in machine learning and statistics to prepare for a career in data-driven decision making.

× I'm still a student major in e-commerce and I have some compulsory courses such as UMM, data analysis or supply chain which are very useful for my future jobs.

✓ I'm still a student majoring in e-commerce, and I have some compulsory courses such as UMM, data analysis, and supply chain, which are very useful for my future job.

句子结构问题：原句中“major in e-commerce”位置和形式不当，应该使用动名词短语“majoring in”；并且并列项使用“or”不符合语境，改为“and”。“future jobs”改为不可数短语“future job”或复数需更明确，这里用单数更自然。建议：把动词短语放在恰当位置，使用正确的并列连词，并注意可数/不可数名词的搭配。

× I study in schools library because uh, everyone is concentrating and I love the quiet and peaceful atmosphere.

✓ I study in the school library because everyone is concentrating, and I love the quiet and peaceful atmosphere.

现在时使用问题：原句中“schools library”缺少所有格或限定词，应为“the school library”。去掉口语填充词“uh”，并在并列句中加连接词使时态一致。建议：注意定冠词和名词的单复数形式及所有格结构。

× I think so because I am the person who can't focus on one thing for a long time, but when I sitting in the library in the atmosphere makes me feel, uh, concentrating and work.

✓ I think so because I am the kind of person who can't focus on one thing for a long time, but when I sit in the library the atmosphere makes me feel focused and productive.

现在时和句子结构错误：原句使用了错误的动词形式“sitting”而缺少助动词或应为一般现在时“sit”；“concentrating and work”词类混用，应使用形容词或过去分词“focused”和形容词“productive”。建议：主句采用一般现在时，非限制性定语从句用正确动词形式，并用恰当的形容词描述状态。

× MMM I wouldn't like the place where I study to change because I'm used to study in the same place. It helps me to keep my daily routine and concentrate better better so I prefer the familiar environment.

✓ I wouldn't like the place where I study to change because I'm used to studying in the same place. It helps me keep my daily routine and concentrate better, so I prefer the familiar environment.

连词及动名词使用问题：原句“used to study”应为“used to studying”或“used to + doing”；重复“better better”为口语冗余，去掉一个。连词“so”前后应以逗号分隔复合句。建议：注意“used to”后接动名词形式，避免词语重复，并正确使用标点连接分句。

× I plan to pursue a master's degree in data science next year because, uh, I was fond of data analysis and some curricular of data.

✓ I plan to pursue a master's degree in data science next year because I am fond of data analysis and some data-related courses.

时态和词汇错误：句子开头为将来计划，应使用现在时表将来计划“plan to”；原句使用过去时“was fond of”与上下文不一致，应为现在时“am fond of”。“some curricular of data”搭配错误，改为“data-related courses”。建议：注意时态一致性（现在时表达计划和当前喜好），并使用正确的名词搭配。