Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ слишком длинный и немного неструктурированный, с незавершённым предложением. Следует давать более чёткие и краткие ответы, избегая лишних деталей и недосказанностей.

例: I'm currently a student at Belarusian State University, majoring in chemistry because I've always been fascinated by how the universe works. I started developing this interest back in 7th grade when I actively participated in science clubs.

提案: Ответ содержит лишние детали, которые не связаны напрямую с вопросом, и немного неестественен. Следует давать более конкретный и связный ответ, избегая излишних объяснений.

例: I study at Belarusian State University, which is known as the best university in my country. I prefer to study here because I feel comfortable staying close to home at this stage of my life.

提案: Ответ содержит много пауз и неоконченных мыслей, что снижает его естественность и эффективность. Следует практиковать более плавную речь и завершённые предложения.

例: I have only been at the university for three months, so I can't say for sure if it's the best place. However, I enjoy the lectures and lab work because they are new experiences for me and help me learn a lot.

提案: Ответ содержит неясные выражения и паузы, а также некоторые грамматические ошибки. Следует использовать более чёткие формулировки и избегать слов-паразитов.

例: Although it's hard to change the education system here, I think it would be helpful if professors shared their presentations with students. This way, students could focus on understanding the material instead of just copying notes.

提案: Ответ немного расплывчат и содержит лишние вводные фразы. Следует давать более конкретные и структурированные ответы, избегая общих фраз.

例: I plan to graduate with a high GPA because it will help me get into my dream research lab abroad, where I can gain the best opportunities in my field.

× I have started my path in chemistry. When I was in 7th grade, I was an active participant in.

✓ I started my path in chemistry when I was in 7th grade, and I was an active participant in related activities.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks a clear structure. The phrase 'I have started my path in chemistry.' is correct but sounds awkward in this context; using simple past 'I started' fits better. The second sentence is incomplete and needs to be connected properly to the first to form a coherent statement.

× I chose studying in my country as I'm that kind of person who doesn't like traveling and I'm only 13 years old, so it's really early for me to go somewhere else.

✓ I chose to study in my country because I'm the kind of person who doesn't like traveling, and I'm only 13 years old, so it's really early for me to go somewhere else.

The phrase 'I chose studying' is incorrect; the correct form is 'I chose to study'. Also, 'that kind of person' should be preceded by 'the' to specify the type of person. The conjunction 'because' is more appropriate than 'as' here to explain the reason.

× As I enrolled in university only three months ago, I cannot actually say for sure whether I'm, umm, whether it's a good place or not.

✓ As I enrolled in university only three months ago, I cannot actually say for sure whether it is a good place or not.

The phrase 'whether I'm' is incorrect here; the subject should be 'it' referring to the university. The hesitation 'umm' should be omitted for clarity and formality.

× Uh, also, I love the way that I can, uh, put myself.

✓ Also, I love the way that I can express myself.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. The phrase 'put myself' is incorrect and needs a verb to complete the meaning. 'Express myself' is a common phrase that fits the context better.

× To bonus, it's a bit difficult to make any change in the Belarusian system of education.

✓ To be honest, it's a bit difficult to make any changes in the Belarusian system of education.

The phrase 'To bonus' is incorrect and likely a mishearing or typo of 'To be honest'. Also, 'any change' should be pluralized to 'any changes' to match the context.

× However, I suppose that it will be great if UH professors share the presentations with students, as it will make the studying umm less time consuming and the students will start uh by understanding the topic, not by writing.

✓ However, I suppose that it will be great if the professors share the presentations with students, as it will make studying less time-consuming and the students will start by understanding the topic, not by writing.

The abbreviation 'UH' is unclear and likely incorrect; 'the professors' is more appropriate. 'The studying' should be 'studying' without 'the'. 'Less time consuming' should be hyphenated as 'less time-consuming'. The hesitation words 'umm' and 'uh' should be removed for clarity.

× Actually, I'm that kind of person who never shares my plans with others.

✓ Actually, I'm the kind of person who never shares my plans with others.

The phrase 'that kind of person' should be 'the kind of person' to correctly specify the type of person.

× However, the all that I can say is that I plan to graduate from university with high GPA as it allows me to get into my dream lab which is located in the country that provides the best opportunities for my field.

✓ However, all that I can say is that I plan to graduate from university with a high GPA as it will allow me to get into my dream lab, which is located in the country that provides the best opportunities for my field.

The phrase 'the all' is incorrect; it should be 'all'. 'High GPA' needs an article 'a' before it. Also, 'allows' should be 'will allow' to indicate future possibility. Commas are added for clarity.