Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer needs to be clearer and more grammatically correct. Try to start with a direct response, then add supporting details with correct verb tenses and sentence structure. Avoid filler words and unclear phrases.

例: I am currently a postgraduate student at UNSW, majoring in accounting and finance. I have been studying these subjects for one year and I am about to graduate. In the future, I want to become a professional accountant.

提案: Improve your grammar and vocabulary by using correct prepositions and plural forms. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and provide more specific details.

例: I study at UNSW, which I think is a great place to learn. There, I gain professional knowledge in accounting and finance, and I also have opportunities to develop my personal skills.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Use complete sentences and linking words to organize your ideas logically. Be specific about the facilities and why they make the place good for studying.

例: Yes, I think UNSW is a good place to study on campus. There are many buildings with study spaces, including the main library and the law library. All these places have Wi-Fi, which makes them suitable for students to study.

提案: Your answer is confusing and incomplete. Try to express your opinion clearly with correct grammar and complete sentences. Provide specific reasons and use linking words to explain your points.

例: Actually, I don't want the place where I study to make many changes because the main library has updated facilities. However, I think it can be quite noisy sometimes, which makes it hard to concentrate.

提案: Avoid filler words and improve sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence, then explain your plans with specific details and reasons using linking words.

例: My future study plans include preparing for the CA or CPA courses because I want to become a professional accountant. Obtaining these certificates will support my career goals.

× I am a still done right now.

✓ I am still a student right now.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and missing words, making it unclear. The correct structure is 'I am still a student right now' to express the current status clearly.

× I'm my major in accounting and finance.

✓ My major is accounting and finance.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'I'm my major'. The correct form is 'My major is' to state one's field of study.

× I already studied these measures uh one years and I almost graduate so I wanna be a professional accountant in the future.

✓ I have already studied these subjects for one year and I am almost graduating, so I want to be a professional accountant in the future.

The original sentence uses incorrect tense and plural forms. 'Studied' should be present perfect 'have studied' to indicate experience up to now. 'One years' should be 'one year'. 'I almost graduate' should be 'I am almost graduating' to indicate near future event.

× I study in UNSW so I think UNSW is a good places to study.

✓ I study at UNSW, so I think UNSW is a good place to study.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect for institutions; 'at' is used. 'Places' should be singular 'place' to match the context.

× I can learnt a professional knowledge about the accounting and finance and I also can develop my personal skill.

✓ I can learn professional knowledge about accounting and finance and I can also develop my personal skills.

'Learnt' is past tense; after 'can' the base form 'learn' is required. 'A professional knowledge' is incorrect; 'professional knowledge' is uncountable and does not need 'a'. 'Skill' should be plural 'skills' to indicate multiple abilities.

× Yes I think you can. SW is a good place to study in the campus.

✓ Yes, I think you can. UNSW is a good place to study on campus.

'SW' is likely a typo for 'UNSW'. 'In the campus' should be 'on campus' as the correct preposition for locations like campuses.

× There are lots of are building have the study space and also have main library and the law library to offer to students to study.

✓ There are lots of buildings that have study spaces, and there is also a main library and a law library for students to study.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and confusing. Correct sentence structure includes plural 'buildings', proper relative clauses, and articles before 'main library' and 'law library'.

× So all have the Wi-Fi and suitable for student study.

✓ They all have Wi-Fi and are suitable for student study.

The sentence lacks a subject; 'all' needs a pronoun like 'they'. Also, 'Wi-Fi' does not need 'the'. 'Suitable for student study' is acceptable but could be improved to 'suitable for students to study'.

× Actually I don't like the places I study to make any changes Cos the reason they are knows the main library they are are updated in the their facility.

✓ Actually, I don't want the places where I study to make any changes because the main library is updated with good facilities.

The original sentence is confusing with incorrect pronouns and verb forms. 'I don't like the places I study to make any changes' is unclear; 'I don't want the places where I study to make any changes' is clearer. 'They are knows' is incorrect; 'the main library is' is correct. 'They are are updated in the their facility' is ungrammatical; 'is updated with good facilities' is correct.

× However I think it's quite noisy because it's.

✓ However, I think it's quite noisy sometimes.

The original sentence is incomplete and ends abruptly. Adding 'sometimes' completes the thought and makes the sentence grammatical.

× Uh, my future study plans is prepared, uh, the CA or CPA courses because I wanna be a, a professional accountant to get a CA or CPA certificate and I want to, uh, get this certificate to support my future plans.

✓ Uh, my future study plans are to prepare for the CA or CPA courses because I want to be a professional accountant and get a CA or CPA certificate to support my future plans.

'Plans is' should be 'plans are' to agree in number. 'Prepared' should be 'to prepare' to indicate intention. 'Wanna' is informal; 'want to' is preferred. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.