Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 文法の誤り（例えば、"I was student" は "I was a student" が正しい）を修正し、より自然な表現を使うことが重要です。また、情報を簡潔にまとめ、冗長さを避けることも必要です。

例: I was a student until recently, graduating from vocational school in March. Now, I work part-time at a bubble tea shop.

提案: 文法的に正しい文を作ることが必要です。過去形の使い方に注意し、場所の説明を明確にしましょう。

例: I studied at Mejiro in Tokyo.

提案: 文の構造を改善し、接続詞を使って文をつなげるとより自然になります。また、冠詞の使い方にも注意しましょう。

例: Yes, Mejiro Station is a good place to study because the neighborhood is very quiet.

提案: 文法的な誤り（"the some libraries" は不自然）を修正し、具体的な理由や詳細を加えると良いです。

例: I would like to have more libraries built because they provide a quiet place to study and access to many books.

提案: 口語表現（"wanna"）は避け、文法的に正しい表現を使いましょう。また、計画の詳細を加えると良いです。

例: In the future, I plan to study abroad because I want to learn psychology in depth.

× I was student until recently.

✓ I was a student until recently.

The noun 'student' is singular and requires the indefinite article 'a' before it. Without the article, the sentence is grammatically incorrect. To improve, always use 'a' or 'an' before singular countable nouns when referring to one item or person.

× Now I'm working a part time job at the bubble tea shop.

✓ Now I'm working a part-time job at the bubble tea shop.

The phrase 'part time' should be hyphenated as 'part-time' when used as an adjective before a noun. This is a common convention in English to clarify that the two words function together as a single modifier.

× I was studied Majuro in Tokyo.

✓ I studied Majuro in Tokyo.

The auxiliary verb 'was' is incorrectly used with the past tense verb 'studied'. The correct form is simply the past tense verb 'studied' without 'was'. 'Was studied' would be passive voice, which is not appropriate here.

× Yes, it is Mejiro station. neighborhood is very quiet so it is good place to study.

✓ Yes, it is Mejiro station. The neighborhood is very quiet, so it is a good place to study.

The sentence is missing the definite article 'The' before 'neighborhood' and the indefinite article 'a' before 'good place'. Articles are necessary to specify nouns properly. Also, a comma is needed before 'so' to separate the clauses.

× I would like to build the some libraries.

✓ I would like to build some libraries.

The phrase 'the some' is incorrect because 'some' already indicates an unspecified quantity. Using both 'the' and 'some' together is redundant and ungrammatical.

× In the future my study plan is go to study abroad and I wanna learn psychology.

✓ In the future, my study plan is to go study abroad and I want to learn psychology.

The verb phrase 'is go to study' is incorrect; it should be 'is to go study' to use the infinitive form after 'is'. Also, 'wanna' is informal and should be replaced with 'want to' in formal contexts. Adding a comma after 'In the future' improves readability.