Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は直接的で明確ですが、文法的に少し不自然な部分があります。例えば、「specializing agricultural science」ではなく「specializing in agricultural science」とするべきです。また、もう少し自然な表現にするために、簡潔に「I'm a fourth-year university student in Japan, majoring in agricultural science.」のように言い換えることをおすすめします。

例: I'm a fourth-year university student in Japan, majoring in agricultural science.

提案: 文法と語順に誤りがあります。「in laboratory」ではなく「in the laboratory」と冠詞が必要です。また、「it's a so quiet place」は不自然で、「it's a very quiet place」が適切です。さらに、理由を述べる際に接続詞を使うとより自然です。

例: I often study in the laboratory at my university because it's a very quiet place, which helps me concentrate.

提案: 「great press for me」は意味が不明瞭で誤用です。「great place for me」が正しい表現です。また、「so that it helps me concentrate to study」も不自然で、「so it helps me concentrate on my studies」と言い換えると自然です。

例: Yes, it's a great place for me because it's really quiet, so it helps me concentrate on my studies.

提案: 文法的に多くの誤りがあります。「I'd like it to change several things」より「I'd like to change several things about it」が自然です。「I use a low desk」ではなく「I have a low desk」や「There is a low desk」が適切です。「I hope it makes expand」は不自然で、「I hope the room can be expanded」などに修正が必要です。

例: Yes, I'd like to change several things about it. Firstly, I have a low desk in my laboratory, so I'd like a new, higher desk. Secondly, the room is a bit narrow, so I hope it can be expanded.

提案: 「go to master program」ではなく「enroll in a master's program」が正しい表現です。「I hope around my field in depth」は意味が不明瞭で、「I hope to study my field in depth」などに修正が必要です。文をより自然にするために接続詞や前置詞の使い方を改善しましょう。

例: In the future, I'm planning to enroll in a master's program at Wageningen University, which is famous for horticultural science, and I hope to study my field in depth.

× I'm a fourth year university student in Japan and I'm specializing agricultural science.

✓ I'm a fourth-year university student in Japan and I'm specializing in agricultural science.

The phrase 'specializing agricultural science' is missing the preposition 'in' which is necessary to indicate the field of specialization. Also, 'fourth year' should be hyphenated as 'fourth-year' when used as a compound adjective before a noun.

× I often study in laboratory at my university because it's a so quiet place and it helps me concentrate.

✓ I often study in the laboratory at my university because it's a very quiet place and it helps me concentrate.

The noun 'laboratory' requires the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific place. Also, 'a so quiet place' is incorrect; 'so' should be replaced with 'very' to correctly modify the adjective 'quiet'.

× Yes, it's great press for me because it's really quiet so that it helps me concentrate to study.

✓ Yes, it's great for me because it's really quiet, so it helps me concentrate on studying.

The phrase 'great press' is incorrect; it should be 'great'. Also, 'so that it helps me concentrate to study' is awkward; 'so it helps me concentrate on studying' is the correct form. The preposition 'on' is necessary after 'concentrate'.

× Yes, I'd like it to change several things. Firstly, I use a low desk in my laboratory so that I'd like a new desk. Secondly, the room in my laboratory is a bit narrow, so I hope it makes expand.

✓ Yes, I'd like to change several things. Firstly, I use a low desk in my laboratory, so I'd like a new desk. Secondly, the room in my laboratory is a bit narrow, so I hope it can be expanded.

The phrase 'I'd like it to change' is incorrect; it should be 'I'd like to change'. Also, 'so that I'd like a new desk' is awkward; 'so I'd like a new desk' is better. The phrase 'I hope it makes expand' is incorrect; the correct passive form is 'I hope it can be expanded'.

× In the future I'm planning to go to master program at Wageningen University, which is famous for horticultural science, and then, I hope around my field in depth.

✓ In the future, I'm planning to go to a master's program at Wageningen University, which is famous for horticultural science, and then, I hope to study my field in depth.

The phrase 'go to master program' is missing the article 'a' and the possessive form 'master's'. Also, 'I hope around my field in depth' is incorrect; it should be 'I hope to study my field in depth' to express the intended meaning clearly.