Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but try to avoid repeating the word "work" multiple times. Also, use correct subject-verb agreement, for example, "children who have special needs." Try to make your sentences more concise and natural by combining ideas smoothly.

例: I currently work at an International School that supports inclusive education while following the mainstream curriculum. I assist children with special needs, which makes my job very rewarding.

提案: Your answer is informative and mostly clear. To improve, try to link your sentences for better flow and avoid redundancy, for example, "studied" and "graduated" can be connected. Also, specify what you mean by "working on becoming" to make it clearer.

例: I studied in the Philippines, where I graduated with a degree in Speech Language Pathology and spent five years becoming a certified and registered clinician.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but is a bit unclear and contains filler words like "umm" and "I thought." Try to be more confident and specific. Also, avoid redundancy by combining similar ideas and use linking words to improve coherence.

例: I don't think it was the best place to study because the school had limited resources, such as books and references, which made it challenging to support my learning.

提案: Your answer is clear and well-structured. To improve, try to use more varied vocabulary and linking words to make your points more natural and fluent. For example, use "moreover" or "in addition" to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I believe the university should allocate more funds to improve its programs and resources. Moreover, investing in these areas will better equip students with the knowledge they need to succeed.

提案: Your answer is relevant but incomplete and slightly unclear at the end. Avoid trailing off and try to complete your thoughts. Also, use linking words to connect ideas and improve fluency.

例: In the future, I plan to enroll in a master's program in Speech Language Pathology. Since it has been years since I graduated, pursuing this degree will help me refresh my knowledge and learn new concepts in the field.

× I am currently working, In fact, I work in an International School where I work with children who has special needs.

✓ I am currently working. In fact, I work in an International School where I work with children who have special needs.

The subject 'children' is plural, so the verb should be 'have' instead of 'has' to agree in number. Also, the original sentence had a comma splice; separating into two sentences improves clarity.

× I studied in the Philippines.

✓ I studied in the Philippines.

No correction needed. The past tense 'studied' is correctly used to indicate a completed action in the past.

× I graduated with a degree in Speech Language Pathology.

✓ I graduated with a degree in Speech Language Pathology.

No correction needed. The past tense 'graduated' is correctly used.

× I spent five years working on becoming a certified and registered clinician in the Philippines.

✓ I spent five years working on becoming a certified and registered clinician in the Philippines.

No correction needed. The past tense 'spent' is correctly used.

× I don't think it's the best school to acquire a degree from because when I was studying there my resources were limited in terms of books and we umm, references that I needed for my classes, I thought.

✓ I don't think it's the best school to acquire a degree from because when I was studying there, my resources were limited in terms of books and references that I needed for my classes.

The sentence had unnecessary filler words ('we umm') and a comma splice at the end. Removing fillers and correcting punctuation improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Yes, I think the university should invest more funds in the programs that they have as well as in the resources that they offer to their students.

✓ Yes, I think the university should invest more funds in the programs that they have as well as in the resources that they offer to their students.

No correction needed. The modal verb 'should' is correctly used to express recommendation.

× I feel like allocating budget to these aspects will help the students to be equipped with the knowledge they need to succeed.

✓ I feel that allocating budget to these aspects will help the students be equipped with the knowledge they need to succeed.

The phrase 'I feel like' is informal; 'I feel that' is more appropriate here. Also, 'help the students be equipped' is more concise and correct than 'help the students to be equipped'.

× I would eventually want to enroll in a master of program for Speech Language pathology.

✓ I would eventually want to enroll in a master's program for Speech Language Pathology.

The phrase 'master of program' is incorrect; it should be 'master's program'. Also, 'Speech Language Pathology' should be capitalized as a proper noun.

× It's been years since I graduated and I think re enrolling or acquiring a master's degree would help me to refresh my knowledge at the same time learn new concepts about.

✓ It's been years since I graduated, and I think re-enrolling or acquiring a master's degree would help me refresh my knowledge and learn new concepts at the same time.

The sentence was incomplete and lacked proper conjunctions and punctuation. Adding a comma, hyphen in 're-enrolling', and completing the thought improves clarity and grammatical correctness.