Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tự nhiên và trực tiếp, nhưng có thể thêm một câu để làm rõ hơn về việc bạn học ở đâu hoặc ngành học để câu trả lời phong phú hơn.

例: Currently, I'm still a student at a high school in my hometown, where I focus on science subjects.

提案: Bạn nên tránh lặp từ và câu quá dài, hãy chia câu thành các phần rõ ràng hơn và dùng từ nối để câu mạch lạc hơn.

例: I am studying at a prestigious high school in my city. Many students aspire to enter because it specializes in preparing us for top-tier universities.

提案: Câu trả lời có một số lỗi ngữ pháp và từ thừa, bạn nên luyện tập phát âm và cấu trúc câu để câu trả lời tự nhiên và chính xác hơn.

例: Yes, it is a great place to study because the teachers focus on advanced subjects and the academic programs prepare students well for top universities.

提案: Bạn nên hoàn thành câu và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp, đồng thời dùng từ nối để câu trả lời rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn.

例: I wish my school would offer more interesting clubs because, although it focuses on academics, the current extracurricular activities are quite limited.

提案: Câu trả lời khá tốt nhưng bạn có thể thêm một vài chi tiết cụ thể hơn về các hoạt động ngoại khóa hoặc ngành học để câu trả lời sinh động hơn.

例: I plan to focus on academic subjects and participate in one or two extracurricular activities, such as debating or volunteering, to strengthen my university applications both locally and abroad.

× Currently, I'm still a student of a high school in my hometown.

✓ Currently, I'm still a student at a high school in my hometown.

The preposition 'of' is incorrectly used here; the correct preposition to indicate attendance is 'at'. This is a preposition error but related to singular/plural context of the phrase 'a high school'. Use 'at' to indicate the place where one studies.

× I'm currently I am studying at a high school in my city.

✓ I'm currently studying at a high school in my city.

The phrase 'I'm currently I am studying' is redundant and incorrect. The correct form is 'I'm currently studying'. This is a sentence structure and redundancy issue, but mainly a grammar problem related to verb usage and sentence structure.

× It is a very prestigious school where many people want to admit and want to enter, and my school is specialized in teaching students to get to top tier universities later.

✓ It is a very prestigious school where many people want to be admitted and want to enter, and my school specializes in teaching students to get to top-tier universities later.

The verb 'admit' is incorrectly used as an active verb for 'people want to admit'; it should be passive 'want to be admitted'. Also, 'my school is specialized' should be 'my school specializes' to correctly express the school's function. 'Top tier' should be hyphenated as 'top-tier' when used as an adjective.

× My school is well known for its teaching quality and it also offers excellent academic programs which prepare students uh to for top tier universities and adhere teachers focus a lot on advanced subjects and exams.

✓ My school is well known for its teaching quality and it also offers excellent academic programs which prepare students for top-tier universities, and the teachers focus a lot on advanced subjects and exams.

The phrase 'prepare students uh to for' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'for' without 'to'. Also, 'adhere teachers focus' is incorrect; it should be 'the teachers focus'. 'Top tier' should be hyphenated as 'top-tier'.

× I wish that my school is more opened for clubs.

✓ I wish that my school were more open to clubs.

After 'I wish', the subjunctive mood is used, so 'is' should be 'were'. 'Opened' is incorrect; the adjective 'open' is appropriate here. Also, the preposition 'for' should be 'to' when referring to accessibility or availability.

× Although my school is specialized and it focus on teaching quality and academic programs.

✓ Although my school is specialized and it focuses on teaching quality and academic programs.

The verb 'focus' should be 'focuses' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. This is a subject-verb agreement issue.

× There are also clubs too but there are activities are not so interesting due to.

✓ There are also clubs, but the activities are not very interesting.

The sentence is ungrammatical and incomplete. 'There are activities are not so interesting due to' is incorrect. The corrected sentence removes redundancy and completes the thought properly.