Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy like 'provision my career in my future' and use correct verb forms. Try to directly state your status and add a brief reason with proper grammar.

例: I am currently a B.Tech student at a reputed university, which helps me develop my skills and prepare for my future career.

提案: Your answer is a bit unclear and grammatically incorrect. Try to give a clear, direct answer with proper sentence structure and linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I usually study in my own room where I have all my study materials, but sometimes I study in the university library when I am on campus.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains grammatical errors and redundancy. Use linking words properly and avoid repeating the same idea. Also, try to use more natural expressions.

例: Yes, my room is a great place to study because it is quiet and free from distractions, which helps me concentrate better and work independently.

提案: Your answer is understandable but could be more natural and grammatically correct. Avoid awkward phrases like 'very sufficient' and use linking words to explain your reasons clearly.

例: No, I wouldn't like to change my study room because it meets all my needs, and adding more things might distract me and reduce my focus.

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and grammatically incorrect. Try to express your future plans clearly with correct sentence structure and linking words to make your ideas coherent.

例: In the future, I plan to continue my studies and develop digital skills, which will help me earn online and become financially independent.

× Well, I'm pursuing my B.Tech degree from a reputed university which help me to develop my skills and provision my career in my future.

✓ Well, I'm pursuing my B.Tech degree from a reputed university which helps me to develop my skills and provide for my career in the future.

The verb 'help' should be in third person singular form 'helps' to agree with the singular subject 'university'. Also, 'provision' is a noun; the correct verb is 'provide'. 'In my future' is better expressed as 'in the future' for natural English usage.

× Most of the time I study in my separate room in which all the materials and reading books are available or if I have attached in my university.

✓ Most of the time I study in my separate room where all the materials and reading books are available, or if I am at my university, I study in the university library.

The phrase 'attached in my university' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'at my university'. Also, 'in which' is better replaced by 'where' for natural English. The sentence is restructured for clarity.

× So I study in the library of university.

✓ So I study in the university library.

The phrase 'library of university' is unnatural; the correct phrase is 'university library'.

× Yes, it is a fantastic way to study because in my room it is very quiet and calm and there is not at all distraction which help me to stay focus or concentrate into my study and do my work alone which prefer me to gain more experience.

✓ Yes, it is a fantastic place to study because my room is very quiet and calm, and there are no distractions which help me to stay focused and concentrate on my studies and do my work alone, which allows me to gain more experience.

'Not at all distraction' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'no distractions'. 'Help me to stay focus' should be 'help me to stay focused'. 'Concentrate into my study' should be 'concentrate on my studies'. 'Which prefer me' is incorrect; 'which allows me' is appropriate.

× Without any doubt, no, I do not want to make a change in my studying room anymore because it is very sufficient for me to study and adding more thing will give me distractions and not a better focus on my work.

✓ Without any doubt, no, I do not want to make any changes in my study room anymore because it is sufficient for me to study, and adding more things will distract me and reduce my focus on my work.

'Make a change' is acceptable but 'make any changes' is more natural here. 'Studying room' should be 'study room'. 'Adding more thing' should be 'adding more things'. 'Will give me distractions and not a better focus' is awkward; better to say 'will distract me and reduce my focus'.

× Well, in my thinking, the only plan in my future is to pursue my studies and develop digital skills will which promise me to earn online and become independent.

✓ Well, in my opinion, my only plan for the future is to pursue my studies and develop digital skills, which will enable me to earn online and become independent.

'In my thinking' is unnatural; 'in my opinion' is better. 'The only plan in my future' should be 'my only plan for the future'. The phrase 'develop digital skills will which promise me' is incorrect; it should be 'develop digital skills, which will enable me'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.