Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and direct, which is good. However, you can improve by adding a bit more detail to make your response more engaging and natural. For example, mention what level you are studying or why you chose physics.

例: I am a university student studying physics because I have always been fascinated by how the universe works.

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to organize your ideas more clearly and use linking words to connect your points. Also, avoid redundancy and focus on explaining where and how you study.

例: I usually study in my room because it is quiet and comfortable. I use online resources and textbooks, which help me learn efficiently without wasting time traveling.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but is a bit repetitive and has grammatical mistakes. Try to use linking words and vary your vocabulary to make your response more natural and coherent.

例: Yes, my room is a good place to study because it is free from distractions. This environment helps me focus better and complete my tasks efficiently.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contains irrelevant words like 'business'. Try to answer directly and clearly, using simple and correct sentences. Avoid unnecessary words and focus on your opinion about the study place.

例: I don't think I need to make any changes to my study place because it is well organized and suits my needs perfectly.

提案: Your answer is too long and unclear with some grammatical errors. Try to make your response concise and structured, using linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: My future study plans include gaining a deeper understanding of physics, especially the fundamental laws of the universe. I also want to learn how to apply these laws in everyday life and gain more experience through leadership courses.

× I usually study at my room.

✓ I usually study in my room.

The preposition 'at' is incorrect when referring to a room inside a house; 'in' should be used to indicate being inside a space.

× I prefer online mixers and textbooks which I have because I avoid doing how to study because it takes lots of time for travelling, so it is better that I study.

✓ I prefer online mixers and textbooks that I have because I avoid learning how to study in person since it takes a lot of time to travel, so it is better that I study this way.

The original sentence is confusing and ungrammatical. 'Doing how to study' is incorrect; it should be 'learning how to study.' Also, 'lots of time for travelling' should be 'a lot of time to travel.' The sentence was restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Right, which is a good place to study because it avoids all kinds of distractions and devices and also it helps me to focused on the things related to study which I'm doing and also it helps me to carry out my task when I'm studying.

✓ Yes, it is a good place to study because it avoids all kinds of distractions and devices, and it also helps me to focus on the things related to my studies. It also helps me carry out my tasks when I'm studying.

The original sentence misuses 'which' and has incorrect verb forms like 'helps me to focused' instead of 'helps me to focus.' Pronouns and sentence structure were corrected for clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× My opinion, I don't think I required any changes to be done in that business because everything is doing well, managed and segregated in a proper manner, so it is as good as to keep the place as it is.

✓ In my opinion, I don't think any changes are required in that place because everything is well managed and organized properly, so it is best to keep the place as it is.

The phrase 'My opinion' should be 'In my opinion.' 'I required' is incorrect; it should be 'are required.' 'Business' is likely incorrect in context; 'place' fits better. 'Doing well' is awkward; 'well managed' is better. Sentence was rephrased for clarity and correctness.

× A future study plans are to get in depth knowledge about the physics and the fundamental laws related to the universe and of course how I'm able to apply the laws to my day-to-day life and as well as the past, which I'm doing on board the leadership of course, to gain more experience and more in depth knowledge.

✓ My future study plan is to get in-depth knowledge about physics and the fundamental laws related to the universe, and of course, how I am able to apply these laws to my day-to-day life as well as in the past. I am also working on leadership to gain more experience and deeper knowledge.

The phrase 'A future study plans are' mixes singular and plural; it should be 'My future study plan is.' 'The physics' is incorrect; 'physics' is uncountable and does not need 'the.' The sentence was restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.