Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and concise by avoiding filler words like 'umm' and improving sentence structure. Also, use correct prepositions and plural forms to sound more fluent.

例: I am currently working full-time as a preschool teacher at an international school in Yantai, China, where I teach three-year-old children.

提案: Avoid repetition and improve sentence clarity by structuring your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I am not studying currently because I have already completed my degree. I graduated from a well-known university in Dumaguete, Philippines, where I majored in elementary education with a focus on early childhood.

提案: Complete your sentences and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to explain reasons clearly and provide specific details about what makes the place good.

例: It is definitely a great school to study at because it offers excellent education and a relaxing environment, which helps students focus and enjoy their learning experience.

提案: Avoid filler words and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific examples of opportunities offered by the campus.

例: I wouldn't change anything about the place where I studied because the campus is peaceful, well-maintained, and provides many opportunities for students to learn and grow, such as various clubs and workshops.

提案: Improve grammar and sentence flow by using correct tenses and clearer phrasing. Use linking words to connect your current situation with your future plans.

例: Now that I have finished my bachelor's degree and am working full-time at an international school, I am considering pursuing a master's degree in early childhood education to further expand my knowledge of teaching children.

× I am currently working on International School in Yantai, China as a preschool teacher where I teach three years old, umm, full time.

✓ I am currently working at an International School in Yantai, China as a preschool teacher where I teach three-year-olds full time.

The preposition 'on' is incorrect when referring to working at a place; 'at' is the correct preposition. Also, 'International School' needs an article 'an' because it is a singular countable noun. 'Three years old' should be 'three-year-olds' to correctly describe the children by age. 'Full time' should be written as one word 'full time' or hyphenated 'full-time' when used as an adjective, but here 'full time' as an adverb is acceptable.

× I'm not studying at the moment, I already finished my degree but I used to study in a well known university in Dumaguete, Philippines where I've learned and I finished my my degree with in elementary education major in early childhood.

✓ I'm not studying at the moment; I have already finished my degree, but I used to study at a well-known university in Dumaguete, Philippines where I learned and finished my degree with a major in elementary education, specializing in early childhood.

The phrase 'already finished' should be in present perfect tense 'have already finished' to indicate a past action with present relevance. 'Used to study in' should be 'used to study at' because 'at' is the correct preposition for institutions. 'Well known' should be hyphenated as 'well-known' when used as an adjective. 'I've learned and I finished' is redundant; 'I learned and finished' is clearer. 'My my degree with in' contains repetition and incorrect preposition; it should be 'my degree with a major in'. Also, 'elementary education major in early childhood' is better expressed as 'major in elementary education, specializing in early childhood'.

× It is definitely a good school to study. I would absolutely recommend it to everyone. It's because it's not just a good a great school, but the place is amazing where you can relax and.

✓ It is definitely a good school to study at. I would absolutely recommend it to everyone because it's not just a good school but a great one, and the place is amazing where you can relax.

The phrase 'good a great school' is incorrect; it should be 'good school but a great one' to properly compare. Also, 'to study' should be 'to study at' to correctly use the preposition with 'study'. The sentence was incomplete; adding 'and' at the end without continuation is incorrect, so it was removed for clarity.

× I wouldn't change a thing where I studied because the campus itself is really nice and peaceful and well maintained, and it offers a lot of opportunities to the students to learn more and to grow. Not just a student, but uh, but uh.

✓ I wouldn't change a thing about where I studied because the campus itself is really nice, peaceful, and well-maintained, and it offers a lot of opportunities for students to learn more and grow, not just as students but in many ways.

The phrase 'where I studied' needs the preposition 'about' after 'change a thing'. The repeated 'and' is better replaced with commas for listing adjectives. 'Well maintained' should be hyphenated as 'well-maintained' when used as an adjective. 'To the students' should be 'for students' to correctly express benefit. The phrase 'Not just a student, but uh, but uh.' is incomplete and unclear; it was rephrased for clarity and completeness.

× Now that I finish my bachelor and currently working full time in an International School, I am still thinking about pursuing my masters in still early childhood to expand my knowledge about teaching kids.

✓ Now that I have finished my bachelor's degree and am currently working full time at an International School, I am still thinking about pursuing my master's in early childhood to expand my knowledge about teaching kids.

'Now that I finish' should be 'Now that I have finished' to correctly use present perfect tense for completed action. 'Bachelor' should be 'bachelor's degree' to be grammatically correct. 'Currently working' needs the auxiliary verb 'am' to form the present continuous tense. 'In an International School' should be 'at an International School' for correct preposition. 'Masters' should be 'master's degree'. The phrase 'in still early childhood' is incorrect; it should be 'in early childhood'.