Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时语法和表达需更准确，避免用词错误，如“choose this major place”应为“chose this major”。同时，回答应更简洁自然，避免冗余。

例: I am currently a student at Jisho University, majoring in Data Science and Big Data. I chose this major because it offers excellent job prospects, and I hope to secure a well-paid job in the future.

提案: 回答中应注意语法和表达的准确性，如“with clouds and peaceful atmosphere”表达不清晰，应改为“because of its calm and peaceful atmosphere”。同时，使用连接词使句子更连贯。

例: I prefer to study in the library because of its calm and peaceful atmosphere, which helps me stay focused. Additionally, I enjoy joining study groups with my friends, so we can encourage each other.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和用词不当，如“Def definitely”、“elaborate”应为“library”。句子结构混乱，建议简化并使用连接词。

例: Definitely. Compared to classrooms or dormitories, the library is a better place to study because it offers free Wi-Fi and has many food options nearby, making it convenient and comfortable.

提案: 回答中语法和表达不够准确，如“a great crowded”应为“very crowded”。建议使用更自然的表达，并注意句子连贯。

例: Yes, definitely. As the number of students increases, the library has become very crowded. I would appreciate it if the school could expand the library and provide more comfortable seating.

提案: 回答中充满犹豫和口头语，影响流畅度。建议提前准备，减少犹豫，使用完整句子表达未来计划。

例: To be honest, I am not entirely sure yet, but I plan to apply for a master's degree after I graduate. I am interested in pursuing research in my field.

× I choose this major place, I think it has an excellent job perspective so I hope to line a decent and well paid job in the future.

✓ I chose this major because I think it has excellent job prospects, so I hope to find a decent and well-paid job in the future.

这里“choose”时态错误，应为过去时“chose”；“major place”表达不准确，应为“major”；“job perspective”应为复数“job prospects”；“line”用词错误，应为“find”；“well paid”应加连字符“well-paid”。这些都是单复数和词汇搭配的问题。

× Currently I'm a student studying in Jisho University majoring in Data Science and Big data.

✓ Currently I'm a student studying at Jisho University majoring in Data Science and Big Data.

在表示学校时，通常用介词“at”而非“in”；“Big data”中的“data”应大写为“Data”，因为是专业名称。

× For me, I prefer to study in the library with clouds and peaceful atmosphere which allowed me to stay focused on my studies.

✓ For me, I prefer to study in the library with a calm and peaceful atmosphere which allows me to stay focused on my studies.

“clouds”与语境不符，应为“calm”；“atmosphere”前应加不定冠词“a”；“allowed”时态错误，应为现在时“allows”。

× Also, I can enjoy study groups with my friends so we can encourage each other.

✓ Also, I can enjoy study groups with my friends so that we can encourage each other.

连接词“so”后应加“that”构成“so that”表示目的。

× Compared with the classroom or accommodation, I think elaborate is much better for study and not only because it has lots of foods nearby so you can get the information easily and quickly but also the library have free Wi-Fi so that is a really useful facilities.

✓ Compared with the classroom or accommodation, I think the library is much better for studying not only because it has lots of food nearby so you can get information easily and quickly but also because the library has free Wi-Fi, which is a really useful facility.

“elaborate”用词错误，应为“library”；“study”应为动名词“studying”；“foods”应为不可数名词“food”；“the library have”主谓不一致，应为“the library has”；“facilities”应为单数“facility”与前文呼应。

× Nowadays our school has more and more students than before. Still, the school library is becoming a great crowded, so I would appreciate as much work and expand the library and provide more seats that would be more comfortable.

✓ Nowadays our school has more and more students than before. Still, the school library is becoming very crowded, so I would appreciate it if the school could work to expand the library and provide more seats that would be more comfortable.

“a great crowded”表达错误，应为“very crowded”；“appreciate as much work”表达不清，应为“appreciate it if the school could work”；句子结构需调整使表达更清晰。

× Uh, I just know in the near future I will apply for master degree about umm, maybe, maybe after I graduate from it.

✓ Uh, I just know that in the near future I will apply for a master's degree, maybe after I graduate.

“apply for master degree”缺少冠词，应为“apply for a master's degree”；“graduate from it”中“it”多余，应去掉。

× Uh, I would like to go for PFD and 1st. I'm really into doing research.

✓ Uh, I would like to go for a PhD first. I'm really into doing research.

“PFD”拼写错误，应为“PhD”；“1st”应写为“first”；“go for”后应加冠词“a”。