Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng hơn và tránh lặp lại câu hỏi. Bạn nên bắt đầu trực tiếp trả lời câu hỏi, sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như thiếu từ hoặc sắp xếp từ không chính xác.

例: I am currently a grade 11 student at Sonja High School. Next year, I will prepare for the university entrance exam, which is quite stressful, but I am doing my best.

提案: Bạn nên sử dụng từ ngữ chính xác hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như 'provides a good learning knowledge'. Hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và cụ thể hơn về lý do bạn thích trường.

例: I study at a state school in my hometown. I like it because the teachers are friendly and supportive, and I have many friends there. Moreover, the school offers a good learning environment.

提案: Bạn cần chú ý chính tả và ngữ pháp, ví dụ từ 'Felicity' không phù hợp trong ngữ cảnh này, có thể bạn muốn nói 'facilities'. Câu trả lời nên hoàn chỉnh và có liên kết rõ ràng giữa các ý.

例: Of course, it is a good place to study because the school offers quality education and excellent facilities. Additionally, having many friends there creates a friendly learning environment.

提案: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng và chính xác hơn. Bạn nên tránh dùng từ không chính xác như 'sustain areas' và sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn. Hãy cụ thể hơn về những thay đổi bạn muốn.

例: Yes, I would like the school to make some changes. For example, adding more quiet zones and comfortable study areas would help students concentrate better.

提案: Câu trả lời thiếu rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, cũng như lặp từ và từ không phù hợp như 'learning many time'. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, rõ ràng và sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh.

例: Next year, I will prepare for the university entrance exam, so I am focusing on studying hard and managing my time effectively.

× Well I'm currently a grade 11 at Sonja High school.

✓ Well, I'm currently in grade 11 at Sonja High School.

The phrase 'a grade 11' is incorrect because 'grade 11' is a level or year in school and does not require an article 'a'. Also, 'in grade 11' is the correct prepositional phrase to indicate the current year of study.

× It quite stressful and but I'm trying my best.

✓ It is quite stressful, but I'm trying my best.

The sentence is missing the verb 'is' after 'It' and has an unnecessary conjunction 'and' before 'but'. The correct structure is 'It is quite stressful, but I'm trying my best.'

× Their school provides a good learning knowledge.

✓ Their school provides good learning opportunities.

The phrase 'a good learning knowledge' is incorrect because 'knowledge' is uncountable and does not take 'a'. Also, 'learning opportunities' is a more natural collocation in this context.

× Additionally, I have many friends there which makes the learning environment.

✓ Additionally, I have many friends there, which makes the learning environment better.

The relative pronoun 'which' refers to 'many friends', but the sentence is incomplete and lacks an adjective to describe the learning environment. Adding 'better' completes the meaning.

× Yes, I would like their place where I study to make some change.

✓ Yes, I would like the place where I study to make some changes.

The pronoun 'their' is incorrect here because the speaker is referring to 'the place where I study', so 'the' is appropriate. Also, 'some change' should be plural 'some changes' to indicate multiple improvements.

× For example umm adding more quiet zones and comfortable sustain areas would have students concentrate.

✓ For example, adding more quiet zones and comfortable seating areas would help students concentrate.

The word 'sustain' is incorrect; the intended word is likely 'seating'. Also, 'would have students concentrate' is awkward; 'would help students concentrate' is the correct expression.

× I'm focusing on learning many time and study anyway.

✓ I'm focusing on studying more and managing my time well anyway.

The phrase 'learning many time' is incorrect; 'many time' is ungrammatical. The correct expression is 'studying more' or 'managing my time well' to convey the intended meaning.