Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and improve sentence structure for clarity. Also, use correct terms such as 'translation student' or 'student majoring in chemistry' and keep answers concise and natural.

例: I'm a translation student at Rudihan University, majoring in chemistry. Initially, I chose this field without much information because my brother encouraged me. However, now I understand it better and really enjoy studying it.

提案: Avoid filler words and improve grammar and sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide clear, specific details about the study environment.

例: I study at my university, which has a well-equipped library with computers and comfortable chairs. Because of this, I can concentrate on my lessons easily.

提案: Try to avoid repetition and improve sentence flow by using linking words. Also, correct grammar such as plural forms and article usage will make your answer more natural.

例: Yes, my university is a good place to study because it has a well-equipped library with computers and comfortable chairs. Additionally, the quiet and organized environment helps me concentrate on my lessons easily.

提案: Improve grammar and sentence clarity. Use linking words to explain reasons and effects clearly. Also, avoid awkward phrasing and be specific about the changes you want.

例: Yes, I would like to change the lighting because it is too dim to read books comfortably. Improving the lighting would definitely help me concentrate better on my lessons.

提案: Avoid repetition and filler phrases. Use correct vocabulary such as 'abroad' instead of 'broad' and improve sentence structure for clarity. Be specific about your plans and reasons.

例: I plan to obtain my IELTS certification to improve my English because I believe it will help me emigrate abroad more easily. This is something I am really looking forward to.

× I'm translate student at Rudihan University.

✓ I'm a translation student at Rudihan University.

The adjective 'translate' is incorrect here; the correct form is 'translation' to describe the type of student. Also, the article 'a' is needed before the singular noun 'student'.

× When I choose this uh, field, uh, I didn't have any information about it, uh, because my brother encouraged me to choose it, uh, but now I know about it more and I love it.

✓ When I chose this field, I didn't have any information about it because my brother encouraged me to choose it, but now I know more about it and I love it.

The verb 'choose' should be in the past tense 'chose' to match the past time frame indicated by 'When'. Also, 'know about it more' is better expressed as 'know more about it' for correct adverb placement.

× I study at my university, uh, there is well library equipped such as computer and comfortable chairs and I can concentrate on my lessons uh, easy.

✓ I study at my university; there is a well-equipped library with computers and comfortable chairs, and I can concentrate on my lessons easily.

The phrase 'there is well library equipped' is incorrect. It should be 'there is a well-equipped library'. Also, 'computer' should be plural 'computers' to match the context, and 'easy' should be the adverb 'easily' to modify 'concentrate'.

× Yes, my university is a good place to study because it has well equipped library with computer and comfortable chairs and then it has a quiet and organized place that you can concentrate on your lessons easily.

✓ Yes, my university is a good place to study because it has a well-equipped library with computers and comfortable chairs, and it also has a quiet and organized place where you can concentrate on your lessons easily.

The phrase 'well equipped library' needs an article 'a' and a hyphen to form 'a well-equipped library'. 'Computer' should be plural 'computers' to indicate more than one. Also, 'then' is unnecessary and 'that' should be 'where' to refer to a place.

× Yes, I would like to change lights because the lighting too dim that you can see your books.

✓ Yes, I would like to change the lights because the lighting is too dim to see your books.

The sentence lacks the article 'the' before 'lights'. Also, 'too dim that you can see' is incorrect; it should be 'too dim to see' to express inability.

× And so I think change lighting improve definitely to concentrate on your lessons.

✓ So, I think changing the lighting would definitely improve concentration on your lessons.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'Change lighting improve definitely' is incorrect structure. Using the gerund 'changing' and modal 'would' clarifies the meaning. Also, 'concentrate on your lessons' should be 'concentration on your lessons' for noun form.

× I plan to obtain my IR certification to improve my English because I think it helps me to emigrate broad easily.

✓ I plan to obtain my IR certification to improve my English because I think it helps me to emigrate abroad easily.

The word 'broad' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'abroad' meaning 'in or to a foreign country'.

× So it's things it's things that I really looking forward.

✓ So these are things that I am really looking forward to.

The phrase 'it's things it's things' is redundant and incorrect. 'I really looking forward' lacks the auxiliary verb 'am' and the preposition 'to' is needed after 'looking forward'.