Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 質問に対して直接的な回答はできていますが、回答が短く、情報が不足しています。より自然で効果的な回答にするために、どのような学生かや専攻などの詳細を加えると良いでしょう。

例: I am currently a university student studying environmental science in Nagano.

提案: 回答は質問に答えていますが、繰り返しがあり、自然な英語表現として改善の余地があります。場所の説明をもう少し具体的にし、繋ぎ言葉を使って流れを良くしましょう。

例: I study at a university in Nagano, which is known for its beautiful natural surroundings.

提案: 回答は明確で具体的ですが、より自然な流れのために接続詞を使い、少し表現を豊かにすると良いでしょう。

例: Yes, it is a great place to study because there are many natural areas around the university, so it's quiet, which helps me relax and concentrate on my studies.

提案: 意図は伝わりますが、文法的に不自然な部分があります。より自然な表現に直し、理由を明確に述べると良いでしょう。

例: I would like my university to provide more study spaces because the libraries get very crowded during exam periods.

提案: 回答は内容的に良いですが、より自然な英語にするために表現を改善し、接続詞を使って文をつなげると良いでしょう。

例: After graduating from university, I plan to attend graduate school to study biomaterials in more depth because I am passionate about this field.

× There are many natural places in there.

✓ There are many natural places there.

The phrase 'in there' is incorrect when referring to a general location like Nagano. 'There' alone is sufficient to indicate the place. Using 'in there' implies being inside a specific enclosed space, which is not the case here.

× There are many natural places around university so it's quiet and I can relax and concentrate on my study.

✓ There are many natural places around the university, so it's quiet and I can relax and concentrate on my studies.

The noun 'university' requires the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific institution. Also, 'study' should be pluralized to 'studies' when referring to academic work in general. Additionally, a comma is needed before 'so' to separate the clauses.

× I like my university to increase more study spaces because in exam periods libraries are full of people.

✓ I would like my university to increase the number of study spaces because during exam periods, libraries are full of people.

The phrase 'increase more study spaces' is incorrect; 'increase the number of study spaces' is the proper expression. Also, 'in exam periods' should be 'during exam periods' to correctly indicate time. The sentence also benefits from adding 'would' to express a polite desire.