Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear but could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy and grammatical errors such as "in abroad" which should be "abroad." Also, try to combine your ideas smoothly using linking words.

例: I have just graduated from university, so I am not working at the moment. However, I plan to pursue higher education abroad to further my studies.

提案: Your answer is direct and clear but could be improved by adding a linking word and a bit more detail to enrich the response.

例: I completed my bachelor's degree at State University, which is located in Aftanagar, and it provided me with a solid academic foundation.

提案: Good use of specific details and linking words. To improve, you could make the answer more natural by combining sentences and using smoother transitions.

例: Absolutely, it is a renowned private university in our country; in fact, it was ranked third among all engineering universities in 2022, which reflects its high academic standards and quality faculty.

提案: Your answer is brief and somewhat informal. Avoid filler words like "Uh" and provide more specific reasons to support your opinion. Also, correct "in city" to "in the city."

例: No, I wouldn't like any changes because the university is well-structured and conveniently located in the city, making it easy for students to access.

提案: Your answer has some grammatical errors and unclear phrases, such as "start a IT farm for my experience." Try to clarify your intentions and use correct articles and prepositions. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas.

例: I plan to pursue a higher degree abroad in my field so that, in the future, I can start an IT firm and apply the knowledge and experience I gain.

× I am planning to pursue my higher education in abroad.

✓ I am planning to pursue my higher education abroad.

The preposition 'in' is not used before 'abroad'. 'Abroad' itself implies 'in a foreign country', so the correct phrase is 'pursue my higher education abroad'.

× I completed my bachelor's degree at State University which is located in Aftanagar.

✓ I completed my bachelor's degree at the State University which is located in Aftanagar.

When referring to a specific university by name, the definite article 'the' is often required before the name if it includes a common noun like 'State University'. This clarifies that it is a particular institution.

× It is really structured and situated in the right place in city.

✓ It is really structured and situated in the right place in the city.

The noun 'city' requires the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific city. The phrase should be 'in the city' to be grammatically correct.

× I want to go abroad for a higher degree on my subject so that in future I can start a IT farm for my experience.

✓ I want to go abroad for a higher degree in my subject so that in the future I can start an IT firm based on my experience.

The correct preposition to use with 'degree' is 'in' when specifying the subject area. Also, 'in future' should be 'in the future' to refer to a specific time frame. Additionally, 'a IT farm' is incorrect; it should be 'an IT firm'. 'Firm' is the correct word for a business, and 'an' is used before words starting with a vowel sound.