Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ должен быть более естественным и структурированным. Избегайте повторений и уточните название школы без ошибок. Также используйте связующие слова для плавности.

例: I am currently a student at Jewel High School, a private institution where I am in the 11th grade.

提案: Избегайте повторения информации и исправьте название школы. Используйте связующие слова для логичности и избегайте слов-паразитов.

例: I study at Joao High School, which is a large private school offering various activities and many advantages over public schools.

提案: Сократите использование слов-паразитов и сделайте ответ более связным, используя подходящие связующие слова.

例: Absolutely, it provides a great environment that helps me focus on my studies and prepare effectively for exams.

提案: Ответ слишком короткий и неструктурированный. Расширьте ответ, объясняя причины и используйте связующие слова.

例: Yes, I would like to have a different math teacher because the current one is very strict and demanding, which sometimes makes it hard to keep up with the lessons.

提案: Ответ прерван и содержит много слов-паразитов. Постарайтесь завершить мысль и использовать более точные выражения.

例: I plan to apply to university to earn my bachelor's degree, and afterwards, I hope to pursue a master's degree abroad to broaden my academic and cultural experience.

× Currently I'm a student, I study at private high school which called Jewel High School and I'm at 11th grade.

✓ Currently I'm a student, I study at a private high school called Jewel High School and I'm in 11th grade.

The sentence is missing the indefinite article 'a' before 'private high school' and uses 'at 11th grade' instead of the correct preposition 'in 11th grade'. The definite article 'the' is not appropriate here because the school is being introduced for the first time. Also, 'which called' is incorrect; it should be 'called'. Suggestions: use 'a' before singular countable nouns when introducing them, use 'in' for grades in school, and use the past participle 'called' correctly.

× As I mentioned before, I studied private school called Joao High School, and, uh, this is an, uh, huge private school with different activities and, uh, there are a lot of privileges compared to public school.

✓ As I mentioned before, I study at a private school called Joao High School, and, uh, this is a huge private school with different activities and, uh, there are a lot of privileges compared to public schools.

The student incorrectly used the past tense 'studied' when referring to their current school attendance, which should be in the present tense 'study'. Also, 'private school' needs the article 'a' and 'public school' should be plural 'public schools' to match 'a lot of privileges compared to public schools'. Suggestions: use present tense for current actions and include articles before singular countable nouns.

× I would like to change my teacher of math due to the fact that she's very strict and, uh, demanding.

✓ I would like to change my math teacher due to the fact that she's very strict and, uh, demanding.

The phrase 'teacher of math' is awkward and incorrect; the correct form is 'math teacher'. This is a common collocation in English. Suggestions: use noun + noun combinations like 'math teacher' instead of 'teacher of math'.

× So I have a lot of perspective and plans for the future.

✓ So I have a lot of perspectives and plans for the future.

The word 'perspective' is usually countable in this context and should be plural 'perspectives' when used with 'a lot of'. Using the singular form with 'a lot of' is incorrect. Suggestions: use plural form 'perspectives' when referring to multiple viewpoints or outlooks.