Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时应避免重复和语法错误，句子应更简洁自然。例如，“Actually, I quit my job as a project manager a year ago and now I am pursuing a master's degree.”

例: Actually, I quit my job as a project manager a year ago, and now I am pursuing a master's degree.

提案: 回答应更连贯，避免语法错误，使用连接词使句子流畅。例如，“I studied at a college in Ningbo for four years, where I gained a solid foundation in my field. After graduation, I started my career. Next year, I plan to pursue a master's degree in Banking and Finance in Australia to enhance my professional skills.”

例: I studied at a college in Ningbo for four years, where I gained a solid foundation in my field. After graduation, I started my career. Next year, I plan to pursue a master's degree in Banking and Finance in Australia to enhance my professional skills.

提案: 回答较好，但应避免重复表达，句子更简洁自然。例如，“Although I have never been to Australia, I have researched it online and found it to be a beautiful, multicultural country with many international students, making it an excellent place to study.”

例: Although I have never been to Australia, I have researched it online and found it to be a beautiful, multicultural country with many international students, making it an excellent place to study.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不完整，应更准确表达观点。例如，“As I mentioned, I have never been to Australia, so I am not familiar with the current situation. However, if I had the chance, I would suggest lowering tuition fees because they are quite expensive, which makes it difficult for people from disadvantaged backgrounds to afford.”

例: As I mentioned, I have never been to Australia, so I am not familiar with the current situation. However, if I had the chance, I would suggest lowering tuition fees because they are quite expensive, which makes it difficult for people from disadvantaged backgrounds to afford.

提案: 回答中有语法和用词错误，应更准确表达意图。例如，“I am going to pursue my master's degree in Banking and Finance because I want to deepen my knowledge in this field. I believe this will help me develop the skills I need and find a high-paying job.”

例: I am going to pursue my master's degree in Banking and Finance because I want to deepen my knowledge in this field. I believe this will help me develop the skills I need and find a high-paying job.

× I quit my job as a project manager one years ago so and now I'm pursuing a master degree.

✓ I quit my job as a project manager one year ago and now I'm pursuing a master's degree.

“one years ago”中“years”应为单数“year”，因为“one”表示单数；“master degree”应为“master's degree”，表示硕士学位的正确表达。

× I study at colleges in Ningbo for four years where I gained a solid foundation in my field.

✓ I studied at a college in Ningbo for four years where I gained a solid foundation in my field.

“colleges”应为单数“a college”，因为通常指一所学校；另外，时间点是过去，动词应使用过去时“studied”。

× After graduation, I start my career and however I'm to next.

✓ After graduation, I started my career, but now I'm moving on to the next step.

“start”应使用过去时“started”，因为动作发生在过去；“however I'm to next”结构不完整，需改为完整表达。

× Next year I plan to pursue a master degree in Banking and Financial in Australia to enhance my professional skills.

✓ Next year I plan to pursue a master's degree in Banking and Finance in Australia to enhance my professional skills.

“master degree”应为“master's degree”；“Financial”应为名词形式“Finance”，表示专业名称。

× Place to study? Actually, I've never been to Australia, but I've researched a lot online.

✓ A place to study? Actually, I've never been to Australia, but I've researched a lot online.

“Place to study?”作为疑问句，前面应加不定冠词“a”。

× If I have chance to suggest I think they should lower their tutor fees.

✓ If I have a chance to suggest, I think they should lower their tuition fees.

“have chance”缺少冠词，应为“have a chance”；“tutor fees”应为“tuition fees”，表示学费。

× It's pretty expensive you know, and it makes people with from disadvantage background couldn't.

✓ It's pretty expensive, you know, and it makes people from disadvantaged backgrounds unable to afford it.

“disadvantage background”应为形容词形式“disadvantaged backgrounds”；句子结构不完整，需补充完整表达。

× I'm I'm gonna to pursue my master degree in banking and financial because I want to dip my knowledge in this field and I believe this will help me deliver, develop the skill I need and help me find a high paying job.

✓ I'm going to pursue my master's degree in Banking and Finance because I want to deepen my knowledge in this field, and I believe this will help me develop the skills I need and help me find a high-paying job.

“gonna to”错误，应为“going to”；“master degree”应为“master's degree”；“dip my knowledge”应为“deepen my knowledge”；“deliver, develop the skill”表达不当，应为“develop the skills”；“high paying”应加连字符“high-paying”。