Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时应避免无关词汇（如“Wow country”），并注意语法时态一致性。可以更自然地介绍自己和学习的专业，句子结构应简洁明了。

例: I am currently a postgraduate student at the University of Hong Kong, studying for a Master of Accountancy degree, which lasts for one year.

提案: 回答中出现了错误词汇（如“started eating”），应注意发音和用词准确。表达应更流畅，使用连接词使句子连贯。

例: I study in Hong Kong, which is separate from mainland China. I chose to study here because it allows me to stay connected with a diverse and international community.

提案: 回答应避免口头语“Wow”，并注意句子结构的完整性。可以使用连接词丰富表达，使内容更具体。

例: Certainly, Hong Kong is a great place to study because it is a global metropolitan city where I can experience various cultures and meet many like-minded people.

提案: 回答中有过多犹豫词，应减少口头语。表达应更清晰，说明原因时使用更准确的词汇和句式。

例: I would prefer no major changes because sudden changes might affect my study efficiency. I find it difficult to adapt quickly to significant changes.

提案: 回答应避免断句不完整，表达应连贯。可以具体说明为什么更高学位对生活和工作有帮助。

例: After completing my postgraduate studies, I plan to apply for a doctoral program because I believe that obtaining a higher degree will benefit both my career and personal development.

× Wow country.

✓ Wow, my country.

句子结构不完整，缺少主语或谓语。应补充完整表达。

× I'm a postgraduate student in Hong Kong University.

✓ I'm a postgraduate student at Hong Kong University.

大学名称前应使用介词'at'而非'in'，表示在某个机构学习。

× I'm studying the program of Master of Accountancy and the program lasted for only one year.

✓ I'm studying the Master of Accountancy program, and the program lasts for only one year.

时态不一致，描述现在正在学习应使用现在时，且表达更自然。

× I started eating Hong Kong.

✓ I started studying in Hong Kong.

原句中'eating'用错，语义不符，应为'studying'。

× I pursue my postgraduate study in Hong Kong because I think studying in Hong Kong can help me keep touch with the the diverse world.

✓ I pursue my postgraduate study in Hong Kong because I think studying in Hong Kong can help me keep in touch with the diverse world.

短语'keep touch'缺少介词'in'，正确表达为'keep in touch'。

× Hong Kong is also a metropolitan city in the world.

✓ Hong Kong is also a metropolitan city in the world.

此句无明显量词错误，保持原句。

× I have access to different cultures and different people and I can make many like minded people.

✓ I have access to different cultures and different people, and I can make many like-minded friends.

'make many like minded people'表达不当，应为'make many like-minded friends'。

× Umm, maybe not uh, because I think it can hinder my study efficiency and the study effectiveness.

✓ Umm, maybe not, because I think it can hinder my study efficiency and effectiveness.

'the study effectiveness'中冠词使用不当，且表达重复，简化更自然。

× I'm a person who cannot adapt to the things which change very significantly.

✓ I'm a person who cannot adapt to things that change very significantly.

'the things which'中冠词多余，且用'that'更自然。

× Well, after my postgraduate study, I want to apply for the program of a doctor degree because I think.

✓ Well, after my postgraduate study, I want to apply for a doctoral degree program because I think...

'doctor degree'应为'doctoral degree'，且表达更准确。

× Receiving a higher study degree can help my life and work.

✓ Receiving a higher degree can help my life and work.

'higher study degree'表达不自然，简化为'higher degree'更合适。