Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more concise and structured. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and incomplete sentences.

例: I am currently working at a restaurant where I interact with customers daily. For example, I take their orders, handle complaints, and provide solutions to ensure their satisfaction.

提案: Avoid filler words like 'umm' and 'uh'. Use a clear topic sentence and link your ideas logically. Also, maintain consistent tense and avoid mixing past and present.

例: I am not currently studying, but when I need to read, I go to the library because it has a peaceful and calm environment where I can focus easily.

提案: Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and avoid filler words. Also, try to use a wider range of vocabulary and be more specific in your descriptions.

例: Yes, the library is a good place to study because it offers a peaceful environment. Moreover, it provides a wide variety of reading materials, such as history books, comics, articles, and newspapers.

提案: Focus on grammatical accuracy and sentence structure. Use linking words to organize your answer and avoid awkward phrasing. Also, be more specific about what you appreciate.

例: No, I would not like to make any changes to the library because the staff are polite and kind. Additionally, the facilities are excellent, which makes it a comfortable place to study.

提案: Avoid filler words and improve sentence clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas and maintain consistent verb tenses. Be more specific about your future plans.

例: At the moment, I do not have any study plans because I want to focus on gaining work experience. However, in the future, I might pursue medical studies if I decide to continue my education.

× Currently I'm working at a restaurant where I have to deal with the customers on my daily basis and here I have to deal with them like I have to take their orders and deal with their complaints, give them solutions and.

✓ Currently I'm working at a restaurant where I have to deal with customers on a daily basis. I have to take their orders, deal with their complaints, and give them solutions.

The original sentence is a run-on sentence and uses 'the customers' unnecessarily. 'Customers' is a general plural noun here, so the definite article 'the' is not needed. Also, 'on my daily basis' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'on a daily basis'. Breaking the sentence into two improves clarity and flow.

× Umm, currently I don't do studies, but sometimes if I have to like one or two, uh, read any kind of books so I go to the library.

✓ Umm, currently I don't study, but sometimes if I want to read one or two books, I go to the library.

The phrase 'I don't do studies' is unnatural; 'I don't study' is the correct expression. Also, 'if I have to like one or two, uh, read any kind of books' is awkward and ungrammatical. It should be 'if I want to read one or two books'. The verb tense and structure are corrected for clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× There was a peaceful and calm environment and I can focus easily.

✓ There is a peaceful and calm environment, and I can focus easily.

The sentence uses past tense 'was' while referring to a current or general state. Since the student is talking about the library's environment currently, the present tense 'is' should be used. This aligns the verb tense with the context.

× Yeah, it is good place for study because there is very peaceful environment in the library and I can also, uh, have many options for reading books like history books, comics, articles and newspapers.

✓ Yeah, it is a good place to study because there is a very peaceful environment in the library, and I also have many options for reading books like history books, comics, articles, and newspapers.

The sentence is missing the indefinite article 'a' before 'good place' and 'very peaceful environment'. Also, 'for study' should be 'to study' to express purpose. Adding commas improves readability. These corrections fix article usage and preposition choice.

× No, I don't would like to make any changes in the library because all this stuff in the library is quite polite and kind nature and also the facilities of this library is quite fantastic, so I don't need to change.

✓ No, I would not like to make any changes in the library because all the staff in the library are quite polite and kind in nature, and also the facilities of this library are quite fantastic, so I don't need to change anything.

The phrase 'I don't would like' is incorrect; the correct modal verb usage is 'I would not like'. 'All this stuff' should be 'all the staff' to refer to people. 'Facilities ... is' should be 'facilities ... are' to agree in number. Also, 'kind nature' needs the preposition 'in'. These corrections address modal verb misuse, plural agreement, and preposition errors.

× Currently, I don't have any study plans, but maybe I have in the future.

✓ Currently, I don't have any study plans, but maybe I will have some in the future.

The phrase 'maybe I have in the future' is incorrect because it lacks a modal verb to indicate future possibility. Adding 'will' and 'some' clarifies the future intention and makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× Uh, currently I have to, uh, focus on my work because I wanted to gain more experience in my work.

✓ Uh, currently I have to focus on my work because I want to gain more experience in my work.

The sentence mixes present and past tense incorrectly. 'Currently' indicates present time, so 'wanted' should be 'want' to maintain present tense consistency.

× So, but in future, if I wanted to pursue my study, I wanted to go in medical.

✓ So, in the future, if I want to pursue my studies, I want to go into medicine.

The sentence incorrectly uses past tense 'wanted' when referring to a future possibility. It should use present tense 'want' with a conditional structure. Also, 'go in medical' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'go into medicine'. 'Study' should be plural 'studies' to refer to academic pursuits.