Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答较为自然且直接，但可以更简洁，避免重复信息。

例: I'm a grade 11 student at a local school in Shanghai.

提案: 回答中有较多犹豫词，影响流畅性。建议减少填充词，使用连词使句子更连贯。

例: I currently study in the Yampur area of Shanghai, but previously I attended an international school in Chengdu, Sichuan.

提案: 回答内容丰富，但表达不够流畅，连接词使用不当。建议使用恰当的连接词，避免重复和犹豫词。

例: I think it's a great place to study because the school focuses mainly on art, which suits my interests perfectly. Moreover, the quiet and comfortable environment helps me concentrate better.

提案: 回答不完整且含糊，缺少具体细节。建议明确表达愿望并补充具体原因。

例: I would like the school to be bigger because currently it is quite small, and we don't have enough space for all the students.

提案: 回答中有较多犹豫词，表达不够自信。建议简洁明确地表达计划，并适当补充理由。

例: I am not sure yet, but I plan to study art in England at a college because I want to improve my skills and gain international experience.

× before I was studying in Sichuan Chengdu in a International School.

✓ before I was studying in Sichuan Chengdu in an International School.

在以元音音素开头的单词前应使用不定冠词'an'，而不是'a'。这里'International'以元音音素开头，故应使用'an'。

× our school focuses mainly on art which perfectly suit my interests

✓ our school focuses mainly on art which perfectly suits my interests

主语是单数'school'，谓语动词应使用第三人称单数形式'suits'，以保持主谓一致。

× which perfectly suit my interests

✓ which perfectly suits my interests

关系代词'which'指代单数名词'art'，谓语动词应使用第三人称单数形式'suits'，保持主谓一致。

× and however, the environment UMM here is very quiet and very comfortable, helping me concentrate better in my work.

✓ however, the environment here is very quiet and very comfortable, helping me concentrate better in my work.

'and however'连用不合适，应去掉'and'，直接使用转折连词'however'。

× I will like the place to have a change if that's umm I wish the places can be bigger because our school is really small

✓ I would like the place to have a change; I wish the place could be bigger because our school is really small

表达愿望时，'would like'比'will like'更合适；'can'应改为表示愿望的虚拟语气'could'。

× I wish the places can be bigger because our school is really small and umm actually we don't have enough.

✓ I wish the place could be bigger because our school is really small and actually we don't have enough space.

'places'应为单数形式'place'，与前文保持一致；句尾缺少宾语，补充'空间(space)'使句子完整。