Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: თქვენი პასუხი ბუნებრივია, მაგრამ საჭიროა გაუმჯობესება გრამატიკასა და გამოთქმაში, ასევე გამოთქმების გამარტივება და ზედმეტი სიტყვების მოცილება. გამოიყენეთ უფრო სუფთა და ზუსტი ფორმულირებები, რათა პასუხი იყოს უფრო ეფექტური და გასაგები.

例: I am currently working as a human rights lawyer and have been in this field for five years. I plan to pursue a master's degree at an international university in the UK, so I study English every day to improve my language skills.

提案: თქვენი პასუხი შეიცავს რამდენიმე გრამატიკულ შეცდომას და ლოგიკური კავშირების ნაკლებობას. გამოიყენეთ შესაბამისი კავშირები და გააუმჯობესეთ სიტყვების არჩევანი, რათა პასუხი იყოს უფრო ბუნებრივი და თანმიმდევრული.

例: I usually study at home because I can control my environment, take breaks whenever I want, and enjoy a peaceful atmosphere. However, sometimes I prefer studying at the library because it offers a wide range of books and good lighting, which helps me concentrate better.

提案: თქვენი პასუხი არ არის საკმარისად მკაფიო და შეიცავს გაუგებარ ფრაზებს. გამოიყენეთ უფრო კონკრეტული და ზუსტი აღწერილობები, ასევე გააუმჯობესეთ ლოგიკური კავშირები პასუხში.

例: Yes, it is a good place to study because it has a green environment, fresh air, and a calm atmosphere. Sometimes, I choose other places where I can concentrate better, but this place is excellent for focused work.

提案: თქვენი პასუხი არ არის სრულყოფილი და შეიცავს გრამატიკულ შეცდომებს. ასევე, ბოლო წინადადება არ არის დასრულებული. გირჩევთ გამოიყენოთ სრულყოფილი წინადადებები და გააუმჯობესოთ ლოგიკური სტრუქტურა.

例: I like this place because it suits me well, but I think it needs modernization. For example, better technology and reliable internet access would help. Also, adding more green spaces and fresh air would improve the environment.

提案: თქვენი პასუხი შეიცავს გრამატიკულ შეცდომებს და სიტყვების არასწორ გამოყენებას. გირჩევთ გამოიყენოთ სწორი წინადადების სტრუქტურა და გამოთქმები, რათა პასუხი იყოს უფრო ბუნებრივი და გასაგები.

例: I have important academic goals for the future. First, I want to pursue a master's degree in law in the UK. To prepare, I am currently practicing my English by doing IELTS speaking exercises and taking IELTS tests online.

× However, I want to get my master degree in International University in UK, so I try to hit the book every day and with my hard working get better language level in English.

✓ However, I want to get my master's degree at an international university in the UK, so I try to hit the books every day and with my hard work get a better level in English.

The phrase 'master degree' requires a possessive form 'master's degree' (Article errors). 'International University' should be 'an international university' to indicate any university, and 'in UK' should be 'in the UK' because 'UK' requires the definite article. 'Hit the book' is an idiom and should be pluralized as 'hit the books'. 'Hard working' is incorrect here; it should be 'hard work'. Also, 'get better language level in English' is awkward; it should be 'get a better level in English'. These corrections improve grammatical accuracy and naturalness.

× I usually study at home because I can control my environment, please take breaks whenever I want, eat and have a peaceful atmosphere.

✓ I usually study at home because I can control my environment, take breaks whenever I want, eat, and have a peaceful atmosphere.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'please' which is unnecessary and disrupts the sentence flow. Removing 'please' corrects the sentence structure. Also, the sentence lists actions without proper conjunctions; adding commas and 'and' improves clarity and grammar (Incorrect use of prepositions).

× However, sometimes I like studying at library because there are a wide range of books and good lightning.

✓ However, sometimes I like studying at the library because there is a wide range of books and good lighting.

The phrase 'at library' requires the definite article 'the' to specify the place. 'There are a wide range' is incorrect because 'range' is singular; it should be 'there is a wide range'. 'Lightning' is incorrect; the correct word is 'lighting' referring to illumination. These corrections address preposition and noun usage errors.

× This place and sport is suitable for me because there is a green environment, fresh air and faithful atmosphere.

✓ This place and sport are suitable for me because there is a green environment, fresh air, and a peaceful atmosphere.

The subject 'This place and sport' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' not 'is' (Subject-verb agreement). 'Faithful atmosphere' is incorrect; the correct adjective is 'peaceful' to describe an atmosphere. Adding commas improves readability.

× But I think that this place need a more modernization.

✓ But I think that this place needs more modernization.

The subject 'this place' is singular, so the verb should be 'needs' not 'need' (Subject-verb agreement). 'A more modernization' is incorrect because 'modernization' is uncountable; 'more modernization' is correct without 'a'.

× So it's a good proposed change and.

✓ So it's a good proposed change.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'and' which is a conjunction requiring continuation. Removing 'and' completes the sentence properly (Sentence structure errors).

× So for this purpose currently I am practicing my English using with IELTS speaking practice and also IELTS tests in Internet resources.

✓ So for this purpose, I am currently practicing my English using IELTS speaking practice and also IELTS tests from internet resources.

The phrase 'using with' is incorrect; 'using' alone suffices. 'In Internet resources' should be 'from internet resources' to indicate the source. Adding commas improves sentence clarity.