Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答较为自然，但有些冗长且表达不够简洁。建议回答时直接回应问题，避免重复信息，并注意语法准确性。

例: I recently graduated from university and am currently taking a gap year to reflect on my future plans and reduce pressure from continuous study.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，且部分词汇使用不当。建议简洁明了地介绍学校和专业，避免模糊表达。

例: I studied at the China Academy of Art in Hangzhou, majoring in Art and Technology, which combines design, biology, and coding.

提案: 回答不够连贯，语法和表达错误较多，影响理解。建议练习句子结构，使用连接词使表达更流畅。

例: Yes, it's a great place to study because I have many opportunities to learn from international artists and designers. I often attend lectures, which inspire me with new ideas.

提案: 回答较好，表达清晰且有具体建议。可以增加连接词使句子更连贯。

例: I think the university could offer more opportunities to collaborate with other institutions, such as joint workshops or shared studios, which would be very stimulating.

提案: 回答内容具体且结构清晰，表达自然。可以适当使用连接词增强逻辑性。

例: My short-term goal is to pursue a master's degree in business design because my undergraduate studies made me realize I want to be a designer who understands business and how to bring creative ideas to the market.

× I really wanted sometimes to think about my future.

✓ I really wanted sometimes to think about my future.

该句中'wanted'后面不应直接跟不定式'to think'，但原句语法结构较为口语化且未明显违反规则，故不做改动。

× which is super interdisciplinary and makes this design ball, biology, coding and more.

✓ which is super interdisciplinary and mixes design, biology, coding and more.

原句中'makes this design ball'表达不清，推测为'mixes design'的误写，需改为'mixes design'以表达“融合设计、生物学、编码等”的意思。

× I think there is a good place to study my university of the great chance is to learn from international artist and designers.

✓ I think my university is a good place to study and offers a great chance to learn from international artists and designers.

原句中'there is a good place to study my university'结构混乱，'there is'用法错误，应直接陈述主语'my university'，并调整句子结构使其通顺。

× I often attend lectures and I love getting new ideas Umm so I very kind to study the at layer.

✓ I often attend lectures and I love getting new ideas. Umm, so I am very keen to study there.

原句中'I very kind to study the at layer'语法错误，'very kind'应为'very keen'表示“非常热衷”，且'the at layer'应为'there'，需改正。

× My undergraduate experience made me realize I want to be a designer who understood the business, so I want to learn how creative ideas can actually reach the market.

✓ My undergraduate experience made me realize I want to be a designer who understands the business, so I want to learn how creative ideas can actually reach the market.

原句中'who understood the business'时态不一致，应为现在时'understands'，因为设计师的理解是持续的状态。