Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác. Hãy sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và tránh lặp lại thông tin không cần thiết.

例: I am a student and currently a freshman at Windsor Hill High School. I worked hard to pass the entrance exam and I am proud of my high score. I really enjoy the friendly atmosphere at my school.

提案: Bạn nên sử dụng câu trả lời ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và có cấu trúc tốt hơn. Sử dụng các từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc và tránh lặp từ. Ngoài ra, hãy chú ý phát âm và ngữ pháp để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn.

例: I study at Windsor Hill High School, but I also like to study at home or in the cafeteria. Changing my study environment helps me stay motivated and focused.

提案: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên trình bày ý kiến trực tiếp và cung cấp các chi tiết cụ thể hơn. Sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp và câu có cấu trúc tốt để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn.

例: Yes, Windsor Hill High School is a good place to study. The teachers are very helpful and my friends are friendly, which creates a positive learning environment.

提案: Bạn nên trả lời rõ ràng hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Hãy trình bày ý kiến của bạn một cách mạch lạc và sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp để mô tả những thay đổi bạn muốn thấy.

例: I would like my school to have more modern facilities and updated textbooks. Since the school is old, newer resources would help improve the learning experience.

提案: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng và có cấu trúc tốt hơn. Bạn nên sử dụng từ vựng chính xác và tránh lặp từ. Hãy trình bày kế hoạch học tập tương lai một cách cụ thể và mạch lạc.

例: I plan to obtain IELTS and SAT certificates, as well as other international qualifications. These will help me pursue new opportunities at university.

× I have finish engine exam to my favorite high school and well I did my best and I also got a real I.

✓ I have finished the entrance exam to my favorite high school and well I did my best and I also got a real I.

The verb 'finish' should be in the past participle form 'finished' to correctly form the present perfect tense 'have finished'.

× I am a freshman in Windsor till high school.

✓ I am a freshman at Windsor Hill High School.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect here; 'at' is used to indicate attendance at a school. Also, 'Windsor till high school' seems to be a mishearing or typo; it should be 'Windsor Hill High School'.

× I also got a real I.

✓ I also got a real score.

The phrase 'a real I' is unclear and likely a mispronunciation or typo; 'score' fits the context better as it relates to exam results.

× I think that weather tail is might be the great atmosphere to.

✓ I think that the weather there might create a great atmosphere too.

The phrase 'weather tail' is incorrect; likely meant 'weather there'. Also, 'to' should be 'too' to mean 'also'.

× I study in Windsor till high school and I also often study at home in my study process and I often study in the cafeteria.

✓ I study at Windsor Hill High School and I also often study at home during my study time and I often study in the cafeteria.

Use 'at' for specific locations like schools. 'In my study process' is awkward; 'during my study time' is clearer.

× I love to change studying atmosphere to make it more various and also enhance my motivation.

✓ I love to change my studying environment to make it more varied and also enhance my motivation.

'Studying atmosphere' is better expressed as 'studying environment'. 'More various' is incorrect; 'more varied' is correct.

× Wizard Hill High School is a good place for me to studying and also learning to become a gentle, become more gentle and like what in my knowledge every teacher I really helpful and friends are really friendly.

✓ Windsor Hill High School is a good place for me to study and also learn to become more gentle. From what I know, every teacher is really helpful and friends are really friendly.

After 'to', the base form of the verb is used, not the -ing form. Also, sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× I also think that weather tail is might be the great atmosphere to.

✓ I also think that the weather there might create a great atmosphere too.

'Great' is an adjective correctly used here, but the sentence needed correction for clarity and preposition use.

× I love to study in a modern school like I want the facility is newer and the teacher and the like textbook is more in.

✓ I love to study in a modern school where the facilities are newer and the teachers and textbooks are better.

'Like' is incorrectly used; 'where' introduces a relative clause. 'Facility is newer' should be plural 'facilities are newer'. 'The teacher and the like textbook is more in' is unclear and corrected for clarity.

× Nowadays I try to have a IELTS and SAT certificate and other international certification, so that is make me easier to make it much easier for me to try some news in some new thing in like university.

✓ Nowadays I am trying to get IELTS and SAT certificates and other international certifications, so that it will make it much easier for me to try new things at university.

'Try to have' is better expressed as 'trying to get'. 'Is make' is incorrect; 'will make' is correct future modal usage. 'News' should be 'new things'. 'In like university' corrected to 'at university'.