Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and structured. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and grammatical errors. For example, say "I am a grade 12 commerce student. My favourite subject is Economics because it helps me understand problems like scarcity that people face."

例: I am currently a grade 12 student studying commerce. My favourite subject is Economics because it teaches me about issues like scarcity and how people manage resources.

提案: Make your answer clearer and more coherent by using linking words and correct grammar. Avoid repetition and be specific. For example, say "I study at Universal Academy, which is a very good school. The teachers are hardworking and kind, and they motivate students to work hard and achieve good marks."

例: I study at Universal Academy, which is a reputed school. The teachers are hardworking and kind, and they encourage students to put in effort and score well in exams.

提案: Improve your answer by avoiding repetition and using linking words for coherence. Use correct grammar and be specific. For example, say "Yes, it is a good place to study because the teachers motivate students to work hard and appreciate their efforts, which helps them score good marks."

例: Yes, it is a good place to study because the teachers always motivate students to work hard and appreciate their efforts, which encourages them to score well in exams.

提案: Clarify your answer and correct grammar mistakes. Use linking words to connect ideas and be specific. For example, say "I prefer to study at home, especially in my room. I don't want any changes because it is well organised and peaceful, which helps me stay motivated to work hard and improve my scores."

例: I prefer studying at home, particularly in my room. It is well organised and peaceful, which helps me concentrate and stay motivated to work hard and achieve better results.

提案: Try to give a clear and direct answer without hesitation. Structure your response with a topic sentence and supporting details. For example, say "My future study plan is to attend college or university, but I have not decided which one yet. I want to take advantage of good opportunities to further my education."

例: My future study plan is to attend a college or university, although I have not decided which one yet. I want to make the most of the opportunities available to continue my education.

× My stream is commerce and my favorite subject is economic and I learned from that subject as how the pupils are facing the problem and scarcities and I learned some features about the economics.

✓ My stream is commerce and my favorite subject is economics. I learned from that subject how the pupils are facing problems and scarcities, and I learned some features about economics.

The word 'economic' is an adjective, but here the noun 'economics' is needed to refer to the subject. Also, 'the problem' should be plural 'problems' to match the context. The sentence was long and needed to be split for clarity.

× I'm studying a universal Academy and it's a very good schools and the teachers are very hard working persons and kind of person.

✓ I'm studying at Universal Academy, which is a very good school, and the teachers are very hardworking and kind persons.

The preposition 'at' is used with 'studying' to indicate the place. 'Schools' should be singular 'school' to match the singular institution. 'Hard working' should be 'hardworking' as one word. 'Kind of person' is incorrect; 'kind persons' or 'kind people' is appropriate.

× They really help the students to work hard work and score the good marks in exams.

✓ They really help the students to work hard and score good marks in exams.

The phrase 'work hard work' is redundant; 'work hard' is correct. 'The good marks' should be 'good marks' without 'the' as it is general.

× Yes, it's a good place to study over there and the teachers are always motivate them to do the to do hard work and score the good Marks and exams and they also appreciate them for their work and I think it's a very good place to study over there.

✓ Yes, it's a good place to study, and the teachers always motivate the students to work hard and score good marks in exams. They also appreciate them for their work, and I think it's a very good place to study.

'Motivate them' is unclear; specifying 'the students' is better. 'To do the to do hard work' is incorrect; 'to work hard' is correct. 'The good Marks' should be 'good marks'. Repetition of 'over there' is unnecessary.

× I like the players to study in my home and specific my room.

✓ I like to study at home, specifically in my room.

'Players' is incorrect; likely meant 'places'. 'Specific my room' is incorrect; 'specifically in my room' is correct.

× I don't want any change in my room for the study because it's already Weld a well organised and it's a very peaceful and I've faced my motivate thoughts that motivate me to do hard work and score the better.

✓ I don't want any change in my study room because it's already well organized and very peaceful. I have focused my motivating thoughts that encourage me to work hard and score better.

'Weld' is a typo for 'well'. 'A well organised' should be 'well organized' without 'a'. 'I've faced my motivate thoughts' is incorrect; 'I have focused my motivating thoughts' is correct. 'Score the better' should be 'score better'.

× Uh, my future study plans is, uh, studies plan is, uh, do the become, umm, it's very good opportunity to do, do to do to become and, and the council college or in some universities that I didn't decide yet.

✓ Uh, my future study plan is to become something. It's a very good opportunity to study at a college or university, but I haven't decided yet.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'My future study plans is' has subject-verb agreement error; 'plans are' or 'plan is' is correct. 'Do the become' is incorrect; 'to become' is correct. 'Council college' likely means 'college'. The sentence needs restructuring for clarity.