Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答较完整，但句子较长且略显复杂，建议简化表达，使语言更自然流畅。

例: I am a senior student at Shanghai International Studies University, majoring in a program that combines foreign language studies and economics.

提案: 句子结构不够自然，存在语法错误，建议使用更简洁且语法正确的句子，并适当使用连接词。

例: I study in Shanghai, a mega city with many foreigners and a well-developed financial sector. This environment benefits my studies and offers good job opportunities.

提案: 回答内容丰富且结构清晰，但可以使用更多连接词使表达更连贯。

例: Yes, it is a great place to study, especially for learning English, because many foreigners live in Shanghai, which provides plenty of opportunities to practice speaking daily. Moreover, Shanghai's well-developed financial sector offers numerous internship opportunities, helping students secure satisfying jobs.

提案: 表达有些不自然，建议调整句子结构，使用更地道的表达方式，并注意语法准确性。

例: Yes. Our university focuses mainly on vocabulary and grammar through textbooks. I hope they can include more practical exercises in the curriculum so we can use the foreign language more flexibly.

提案: 句子中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，建议简化句子并注意语法，如比较级和冠词的使用。

例: I am learning Japanese and plan to study harder to improve my listening and speaking skills. Since I plan to pursue a master's degree in Japan, this will help me adapt to the environment there.

× I'm currently a senior student at Shanghai International Studies University, majoring in the comprehensive program which combines the foreign language studies and economics.

✓ I'm currently a senior student at Shanghai International Studies University, majoring in the comprehensive program which combines foreign language studies and economics.

这里“the foreign language studies”中的定冠词“the”使用不当，应该去掉。虽然这属于冠词错误，但根据题目要求只纠正列出的语法问题类型，故此处不做修改。

× I'm studying in Shanghai where is a mega city and there are so many foreigners with foreign languages and the finance is really developed.

✓ I'm studying in Shanghai, which is a mega city with many foreigners who speak foreign languages, and its finance sector is really developed.

原句中“where is a mega city”结构不正确，应该用定语从句“which is a mega city”来修饰“Shanghai”。此外，“there are so many foreigners with foreign languages”表达不清，应改为“many foreigners who speak foreign languages”。句子结构混乱，需调整使其通顺。

× It is very beneficial to my study and provides job opportunities for me in the future.

✓ It is very beneficial to my studies and provides job opportunities for me in the future.

“beneficial to”后面应接复数名词“studies”，表示对学习的益处。原句中“study”用单数不合适。

× which gives us plenty of opportunity to practice speaking in daily life.

✓ which gives us plenty of opportunities to practice speaking in daily life.

“plenty of”后应接复数名词“opportunities”，表示许多机会。原句中“opportunity”用单数不正确。

× So I wish it can add more practical exercise into the curriculum so that we can use the foreign language more flexible.

✓ So I wish it can add more practical exercises into the curriculum so that we can use the foreign language more flexibly.

“exercise”应为复数“exercises”，表示多项练习；“more flexible”中“flexible”是形容词，修饰动词“use”应使用副词“flexibly”。

× The foreign language that I'm learning is Japanese, so I'm going to study more harder in order to improve both my listening and speaking skills.

✓ The foreign language that I'm learning is Japanese, so I'm going to study harder in order to improve both my listening and speaking skills.

“more harder”是错误的比较级叠加，正确用法是“harder”。

× Because I'm planning to study for masters degree in Japan, it helps me acclimatize into the Japanese environment.

✓ Because I'm planning to study for a master's degree in Japan, it will help me acclimatize to the Japanese environment.

“masters degree”应为“a master's degree”，缺少冠词和所有格；“helps me acclimatize into”结构不正确，应该用“help me acclimatize to”。此外，句子应使用将来时“will help”以符合上下文。