Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Tu respuesta es clara pero podría ser más natural y concisa. Evita repetir palabras como "major" y usa estructuras más fluidas para sonar más natural.

例: I'm currently a seventh-semester economics student.

提案: Tu respuesta es confusa y contiene errores gramaticales y de vocabulario. Intenta usar frases más simples y claras, y evita errores en los nombres propios y preposiciones.

例: I study in Marula, Michigan. During the week, I live there, but on weekends I return to my hometown, Pats Crow, which is near Morelia.

提案: Tu respuesta tiene buenas ideas pero la estructura y gramática necesitan mejorar. Usa conectores para que la respuesta sea más coherente y evita errores como "have" en lugar de "has".

例: Yes, I think it's one of the best places to study in the state because the university ranks sixth among university cities in the country. Also, I enjoy studying close to my hometown.

提案: La respuesta es buena pero puede ser más natural y organizada. Usa conectores para explicar tus ideas y corrige errores como "if I could do any change, I do it".

例: I like the place where I study, but if I could make any changes, I would add more green areas. It’s very relaxing to sit on the grass when you don’t have classes.

提案: Tu respuesta es confusa y contiene errores gramaticales y de vocabulario. Clarifica tus planes y usa vocabulario adecuado para expresar tus intenciones.

例: My current plan is to finish my economics degree. In the future, I would like to pursue an MBA to specialize further, especially in the field of culture, which interests me a lot.

× I'm studying on Marula, Michigan, but actually I am from Pasquale but on the week I live here in Marrella and on the weekends I'm going back to my hometown who is Pats Crow.

✓ I'm studying in Marula, Michigan, but actually I am from Pasquale. During the week I live here in Marrella and on the weekends I go back to my hometown, which is Pats Crow.

The preposition 'on' is incorrectly used with locations and time expressions. 'In' is the correct preposition for cities ('in Marula'). Also, 'on the week' should be 'during the week' to indicate time. Additionally, 'going back' is better expressed as 'go back' for habitual actions. 'Who' should be 'which' when referring to places.

× I consider is the best place on the state for study because the university have a really great level on the rankings of the university cities of the country, actually the number six and it's a really pleasure study close to my hometown.

✓ I consider it is the best place in the state to study because the university has a really great ranking among the university cities of the country, actually number six, and it's a real pleasure to study close to my hometown.

The sentence has singular/plural agreement errors: 'the university have' should be 'the university has' because 'university' is singular. Also, 'a really pleasure' should be 'a real pleasure' or 'it's a real pleasure'. Prepositions 'on the state' should be 'in the state' and 'for study' should be 'to study'.

× Of course I like the place where I'm studying and obviously if I could do any change, I do it.

✓ Of course I like the place where I'm studying and obviously if I could make any changes, I would do it.

The modal verb 'could' is used correctly for hypothetical situations, but the main clause should use 'would' to express conditional mood. Also, 'do any change' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'make any changes'.

× For example, put more green areas for the students because it's so relaxed when you don't have class going to sit in the grass.

✓ For example, add more green areas for the students because it's so relaxing when you don't have class and can sit on the grass.

The phrase 'put more green areas for the students' is awkward; 'add more green areas' is better. 'It's so relaxed' should be 'it's so relaxing' to describe the feeling. Also, 'going to sit in the grass' is incorrect; it should be 'can sit on the grass' because we sit 'on' surfaces.

× At the moment my future plans are ending my major and in the future I like to do MBA of my major for being more specific area.

✓ At the moment my future plans are to finish my major and in the future I would like to do an MBA related to my major to specialize in a more specific area.

The phrase 'my future plans are ending my major' is incorrect; it should be 'my future plans are to finish my major' using the infinitive form. 'I like to do MBA' should be 'I would like to do an MBA' to express future intention politely. Also, 'for being more specific area' is incorrect; 'to specialize in a more specific area' is correct.

× I really like the the couture and I like to compliment my major with that.

✓ I really like couture and I would like to complement my major with it.

The phrase 'the the couture' has a repeated article; 'couture' does not need 'the' here. 'Compliment' (praise) is incorrect; the correct word is 'complement' (to complete). 'With that' is vague; 'with it' refers back to 'couture' properly.