Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: ควรปรับปรุงการใช้ไวยากรณ์และคำศัพท์ให้ถูกต้องและเป็นธรรมชาติมากขึ้น เช่น ใช้ประโยคที่สมบูรณ์และหลีกเลี่ยงการพูดซ้ำคำเดิม

例: I am currently a student studying at a school in Nan Optian, Thailand, focusing on science and mathematics courses.

提案: ควรปรับปรุงการใช้ไวยากรณ์และคำเชื่อมเพื่อให้ประโยคลื่นไหลและชัดเจนมากขึ้น เช่น ใช้คำเชื่อมที่เหมาะสมและแก้ไขข้อผิดพลาดทางไวยากรณ์

例: I study at a well-known school in Bangkok, Thailand, which offers a variety of subjects. I enjoy learning there because the teachers are very supportive.

提案: ควรปรับปรุงการใช้คำศัพท์และไวยากรณ์ให้ถูกต้อง รวมถึงใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อเชื่อมโยงประโยคให้ดีขึ้น

例: Definitely, in my opinion, this school is an excellent place to study because it has great facilities and supportive teachers. For example, whenever I feel stressed, my friends and teachers encourage me and help me stay motivated.

提案: ควรปรับปรุงการใช้โครงสร้างประโยคและคำศัพท์ให้ชัดเจนและถูกต้อง รวมถึงอธิบายเหตุผลให้ชัดเจนมากขึ้น

例: Of course, although this school is very good, if I could change one thing, I would like to reduce some unnecessary rules that make life harder for students.

提案: ควรปรับปรุงการใช้ไวยากรณ์และคำศัพท์ให้ถูกต้อง รวมถึงใช้คำเชื่อมและรายละเอียดที่ชัดเจนเพื่ออธิบายแผนการในอนาคต

例: After I graduate, I plan to continue my studies by enrolling in a medical program at a reputable university. I have always been inspired by doctors because they help people recover from illnesses, which motivates me to pursue a career in medicine. I hope that by becoming a doctor, I can make a positive difference in people's lives.

× I am recently student studying in school located on Nan Optian, Thailand.

✓ I am a student currently studying at a school located in Nan Optian, Thailand.

The sentence lacks the article 'a' before 'student' and has awkward word order. 'Recently' is incorrectly used; 'currently' fits better to indicate present action. Also, 'located on' should be 'located in' for a place name.

× I I I studying about scientists and mathematics course.

✓ I am studying science and mathematics courses.

The sentence is missing the auxiliary verb 'am' before 'studying'. Also, 'scientists' is incorrect; the subject is 'science'. 'Mathematics course' should be pluralized to 'courses' if referring to multiple subjects.

× Is is well known school that offer a variety of subject and enjoy learning that because their teachers are very supportive.

✓ It is a well-known school that offers a variety of subjects, and I enjoy learning there because the teachers are very supportive.

The sentence has a repeated word 'Is is' which should be 'It is'. 'School' needs the article 'a'. 'Offer' should be 'offers' to agree with singular subject. 'Subject' should be plural 'subjects'. 'Enjoy learning that' is unclear; 'I enjoy learning there' is correct. 'Their' should be 'the' referring to the teachers of the school.

× Study Definitely, in my opinion, this school is an excellent place for me to study because it had great facility and supported teacher.

✓ Definitely, in my opinion, this school is an excellent place for me to study because it has great facilities and supportive teachers.

'Study Definitely' is incorrect; 'Definitely' should start the sentence. 'Had' should be 'has' to match present tense. 'Facility' should be plural 'facilities'. 'Supported teacher' should be 'supportive teachers' to describe the teachers.

× For example, whenever I feel stressed, my friend and teachers always encourage me and help me stay motivated.

✓ For example, whenever I feel stressed, my friends and teachers always encourage me and help me stay motivated.

'Friend' should be plural 'friends' to match 'teachers' and indicate more than one person.

× Of course, even though I just said that this school is very good, if I could change one thing about this school and wishing some of the guru that I think are unnecessary and make life harder for students.

✓ Of course, even though I just said that this school is very good, if I could change one thing about this school, I would remove some of the rules that I think are unnecessary and make life harder for students.

The sentence is incomplete and awkward. 'Wishing some of the guru' is incorrect; likely meant 'remove some of the rules'. The conditional 'if I could change' needs a main clause, so 'I would remove' is added. 'Guru' is incorrect in this context.

× After I graduate, I plan to continue my studies by enrolling in a medical program and relatively university.

✓ After I graduate, I plan to continue my studies by enrolling in a medical program at a relevant university.

'Relatively university' is incorrect; likely meant 'relevant university'. The article 'a' is needed before 'relevant university'. 'And' is replaced with 'at' to indicate location of study.

× I have always been inspired by doctor because they help people recover from illness and this is motivated me to push through a career in the medic scene.

✓ I have always been inspired by doctors because they help people recover from illness, and this has motivated me to pursue a career in the medical field.

'Doctor' should be plural 'doctors' to match 'they'. 'This is motivated me' is incorrect; should be 'this has motivated me'. 'Push through a career' is awkward; 'pursue a career' is correct. 'Medic scene' should be 'medical field'.

× I hope that by becoming a doctor, academic policy is different in people life.

✓ I hope that by becoming a doctor, I can make a positive difference in people's lives.

The sentence is unclear and ungrammatical. 'Academic policy is different in people life' does not make sense. The corrected sentence expresses the intended meaning clearly with proper grammar and possessive form 'people's lives'.