Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và tự nhiên hơn. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, tránh dùng từ không phù hợp như "expensive" và nên sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, mạch lạc. Hãy tập trung vào việc mô tả trường học một cách cụ thể và dùng từ vựng phù hợp.

例: I am currently a student at Little Dong Secondary School. I really enjoy studying there because the environment is friendly and I learn a lot of new information every day.

提案: Bạn nên tránh lặp lại ý và sử dụng từ chính xác hơn. Từ "expensive information" không phù hợp, hãy dùng từ như "valuable" hoặc "useful". Câu trả lời nên ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và có liên kết logic giữa các ý.

例: I study at Levanton Secondary School. I like it because it provides valuable knowledge and a friendly environment where I have made good friends.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên trình bày ý kiến của mình một cách mạch lạc, sử dụng câu đơn giản và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Hãy dùng từ vựng phù hợp và liên kết các ý bằng từ nối.

例: I believe my school is a good place to study because the environment is friendly and the teachers care a lot about their students.

提案: Bạn nên sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và rõ ràng hơn. Hãy giải thích ý tưởng của bạn một cách cụ thể và dùng từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn. Tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và dùng từ phù hợp.

例: I would like to replace the small television in our classroom with a projector. Since there are many students, a projector would make it easier for everyone to see and follow the lessons.

提案: Bạn nên sử dụng cấu trúc câu chính xác và từ vựng phù hợp hơn. Hãy trình bày kế hoạch học tập của bạn một cách rõ ràng, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và dùng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc.

例: I am currently preparing for the IELTS exam because it will help me in my future career. After that, I plan to study for the SAT to apply to top universities like Harvard or Oxford.

× I very love this school because every day I can learn some news, information and adding the habitat in their own friendly and I think it is expensive to me.

✓ I really love this school because every day I can learn some news and information, and the environment is friendly. I think it is valuable to me.

The phrase 'I very love' is incorrect; 'very' should not modify verbs like 'love'. Instead, use 'really' or 'very much'. 'Adding the habitat in their own friendly' is unclear and grammatically incorrect; it should be rephrased to 'the environment is friendly'. 'Expensive to me' is incorrect in this context; 'valuable' or 'important' is more appropriate.

× I very love this school because it give me a lot of expensive information or give me some friendly habitat or a good friends to me.

✓ I really love this school because it gives me a lot of valuable information, a friendly environment, and good friends.

The phrase 'a lot of expensive information' is incorrect; 'expensive' is not used to describe information. 'Valuable' is the correct adjective. Also, 'some friendly habitat' is incorrect; 'habitat' is not appropriate here, 'environment' is better. 'A good friends' is incorrect because 'a' is singular and 'friends' is plural; it should be 'good friends' without 'a'.

× I very love this school because it give me a lot of expensive information or give me some friendly habitat or a good friends to me.

✓ I really love this school because it gives me a lot of valuable information, a friendly environment, and good friends.

The verb 'give' should be 'gives' to agree with the singular subject 'it'.

× I don't know too much because in other students at another school they say my school is bad but I think my school was good to you because the habitat in there is friendly and the teacher are very love this his their child.

✓ I don't know much because other students at another school say my school is bad, but I think my school is good because the environment there is friendly and the teachers love their students very much.

The phrase 'in other students' is incorrect; it should be 'other students'. 'Habitat' is not appropriate; 'environment' is better. 'The teacher are' is incorrect; 'teachers are' is correct. 'Very love this his their child' is incorrect; it should be 'love their students very much'. Also, 'was good to you' is incorrect; 'is good' fits better here.

× If I can't changes I would change the television.

✓ If I could make changes, I would change the television.

'Can't changes' is incorrect; 'can't' is modal and should be followed by base verb 'change' without 's'. Also, the sentence is conditional; 'If I could make changes' is more appropriate.

× For example everyday I learning and there are a lot of students so the television too small to see.

✓ For example, every day I am learning and there are a lot of students, so the television is too small to see.

'I learning' is incorrect; it should be 'I am learning' for present continuous tense. 'Everyday' should be two words 'every day' when meaning each day. 'The television too small to see' lacks a verb; 'is' is needed.

× So we need a projector to see easier and can update the information and student.

✓ So we need a projector to see more easily and to update the information for students.

'See easier' is incorrect; the adverb form 'more easily' is correct. The conjunction 'and can update' is incomplete; it should be 'and to update'. 'Student' should be plural 'students'.

× Now I am aiming to studying IELTS because it can happen to me to the future career and after that I will study SAT too because they are can help me to the big universities or the world like Harvard or Oxford.

✓ Now I am aiming to study IELTS because it can help me in my future career, and after that I will study SAT too because they can help me get into big universities in the world like Harvard or Oxford.

The phrase 'aiming to studying' is incorrect; after 'aiming to' the base verb 'study' should be used. 'It can happen to me to the future career' is incorrect; 'help me in my future career' is correct. 'They are can help me' is incorrect; 'they can help me' is correct. 'To the big universities or the world' is incorrect; 'get into big universities in the world' is better.