Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时语法和表达不够自然，句子结构混乱，且信息表达不够清晰。建议简化句子结构，直接回答问题，并用连贯的句子表达兴趣和学习内容。

例: I'm a second-year high school student at SFPC, majoring in Economics, Business, and Mathematics. I find these subjects very interesting because they help me understand how businesses operate and improve my analytical skills.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，且“volleyball knowledge”与前文主题不太相关，显得内容不够连贯。建议使用更准确的表达，并保持内容相关。

例: I study at SSFBC High School, which has a pleasant environment and supportive teachers. They help me learn many different subjects, and I also enjoy participating in extracurricular activities like volleyball.

提案: 回答较为简单，句子连接不够流畅，且有语法错误。建议使用连接词使句子更连贯，并注意语法准确性。

例: Yes, it's a great place to study because it has a nice environment and positive teachers who help us learn various subjects. Moreover, my classmates are friendly, so we often discuss our interests together.

提案: 回答表达基本清楚，但句子结构略显简单，且“make me have better health”表达不自然。建议使用更自然的表达方式，并丰富细节。

例: Yes, I would like some improvements at my school. For instance, installing better air conditioners would improve the learning environment and health. Also, adding interactive learning tools could motivate me to study harder.

提案: 回答语法错误较多，表达不清晰，句子不连贯。建议简化句子，直接表达未来计划和兴趣，并注意语法正确。

例: I plan to continue studying Economics, Business, and Mathematics at university because I am very interested in these subjects and believe they will provide valuable knowledge and skills.

× I'm currently a second year high school student in SFPC margin in Economics, business and mathematics.

✓ I'm currently a second-year high school student at SFPC majoring in Economics, Business, and Mathematics.

“second year”应为复合形容词“second-year”，修饰名词“student”。“margin”应为“majoring”，表示主修。专业名称应首字母大写且并列时用逗号分隔。

× I'm currently a second year high school student in SFPC margin in Economics, business and mathematics.

✓ I'm currently a second-year high school student at SFPC majoring in Economics, Business, and Mathematics.

表示在某学校学习，介词应使用“at”而非“in”。

× An interest in the principle of economics, understand the business operations and learn different knowledge about the mathematics is really interesting and can boost me a lot.

✓ An interest in the principles of economics, understanding business operations, and learning different knowledge about mathematics are really interesting and can benefit me a lot.

原句主语部分结构混乱，缺少并列连词，且“principle”应为复数“principles”，“understand”和“learn”应改为动名词形式以保持结构一致。谓语动词应与复数主语一致用“are”。

× I study at SSFBC which is my high school.

✓ I study at SSFBC, which is my high school.

定语从句前应加逗号，表示非限制性定语从句。

× There is nice environment and supportive teachers who can help me to learn a wide range of subjects.

✓ There is a nice environment and supportive teachers who can help me learn a wide range of subjects.

“environment”是可数名词，前面应加冠词“a”。“help me to learn”中“to”可省略。

× I really enjoy studying there 'cause I can get different volleyball knowledge.

✓ I really enjoy studying there because I can gain different knowledge about volleyball.

“'cause”应正式写为“because”。“get different volleyball knowledge”表达不自然，应改为“gain different knowledge about volleyball”。

× Of course it has nice environment and positive teachers can help us to learn a wide range of different subjects and classmates are friendly, we can talk about what we interest in.

✓ Of course, it has a nice environment, and positive teachers can help us learn a wide range of different subjects. Classmates are friendly, and we can talk about what interests us.

“environment”前应加冠词“a”。“help us to learn”中“to”可省略。句子过长，应拆分为两句。最后“what we interest in”应改为“what interests us”。

× we can talk about what we interest in.

✓ we can talk about what interests us.

“interest”作为动词时，后面不接介词“in”，应直接用“interests us”。

× Yes, I would like the place where I study to make some change.

✓ Yes, I would like the place where I study to make some changes.

“change”表示“改变”时通常用复数“changes”，表示多项改进。

× better air conditioners can make me have better health and also the interaction tools can motivate me to study harder.

✓ Better air conditioners can help me have better health, and also interactive tools can motivate me to study harder.

“make me have better health”表达不自然，改为“help me have better health”。“interaction tools”应为“interactive tools”，表示“互动的工具”。

× Because I'm margin in economic, business and mathematics.

✓ Because I'm majoring in Economics, Business, and Mathematics.

“margin”应为“majoring”，表示主修。专业名称首字母大写。

× Because I'm margin in economic, business and mathematics. So I think in the university I will continue to finish my study about those subjects and I'm really interested in it because it can give me a precious and energies I enjoy to I enjoy about learning this subject.

✓ Because I'm majoring in Economics, Business, and Mathematics, I think I will continue to study these subjects at university. I'm really interested in them because they give me valuable knowledge and energy, and I enjoy learning these subjects.

原句断句错误，不能用“Because”开头单独成句。句子结构混乱，表达不清晰，需重组句子使其通顺。

× I'm really interested in it because it can give me a precious and energies I enjoy to I enjoy about learning this subject.

✓ I'm really interested in them because they give me valuable knowledge and energy, and I enjoy learning these subjects.

“it”指代不明确，应使用复数“them”指代多个学科。句子中“precious and energies”搭配错误，应为“valuable knowledge and energy”。