Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear but a bit long and slightly redundant. Try to make your response more concise and natural by avoiding unnecessary details and focusing on the main point.

例: I am currently a student because I have just finished my +2 exams and am preparing for the Common Entrance and English Proficiency tests.

提案: Your answer has some grammar mistakes and unclear phrases. Try to use clearer sentences and correct grammar. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I am preparing for the Common Entrance exam at Vivian Institution, which is very popular in our country and has a friendly environment. For the English Proficiency test, I study at KREC, where the atmosphere is good and my classmates are very nice.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains some repetition and grammar errors. Try to avoid repeating phrases and use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

例: Definitely, it is a good place to study because the environment is different from others. Moreover, the teachers are very friendly and motivate us when we find certain topics difficult.

提案: Your answer is too long and repetitive. Try to be more concise and avoid repeating similar ideas. Use linking words to connect your points clearly.

例: No, I wouldn't like any changes because the institution, teachers, and friends are better and very supportive compared to others.

提案: Your answer is good but has some grammar mistakes and awkward phrasing. Try to use correct grammar and clearer expressions. Also, avoid repeating the same idea.

例: I plan to join medical courses because since childhood, my dream has been to become a successful doctor and help disabled people.

× Recently I have completed my +2 level examinations and I am preparing for my Common entrance examination as well as English Prophecy test.

✓ Recently I completed my +2 level examinations and I am preparing for my Common Entrance examination as well as the English Prophecy test.

The present perfect tense 'have completed' is not incorrect but in this context, simple past 'completed' is more appropriate because the action is finished and specific time is implied by 'recently'. Also, 'Common entrance examination' and 'English Prophecy test' need capitalization and definite article 'the' before 'English Prophecy test' for correctness.

× I am studying Common Entrance examination in Vivian institutions which UH is very popular in our country and have a friendly environment and English prophecy test is in KREC.

✓ I am studying for the Common Entrance examination at Vivian Institutions, which is very popular in our country and has a friendly environment, and the English Prophecy test is at KREC.

The correct preposition for exams is 'for' not 'in'. 'At' is used for institutions. 'Vivian institutions' should be 'Vivian Institutions' as a proper noun. 'Which UH is very popular' is incorrect; it should be 'which is very popular'. 'Have' should be 'has' to agree with singular 'Vivian Institutions'. Also, 'English prophecy test' needs 'the' and capitalization. 'Is in KREC' should be 'is at KREC'.

× Definitely it is a good place to study because the environment we get in that institution is very different than others as well as the teachers are very friendly and they motivated us when we when we get hard on specific topics.

✓ Definitely, it is a good place to study because the environment we get in that institution is very different from others, and the teachers are very friendly and they motivate us when we find specific topics hard.

The phrase 'different than' should be 'different from'. 'Motivated' is past tense but the context requires present tense 'motivate'. 'When we get hard on specific topics' is incorrect; it should be 'when we find specific topics hard'. Also, repeated 'when we' is a mistake.

× Absolutely not, because the place where I'm studying right now is very much better as compared to other institutions as well as the teachers and the friends that we found in that institution are very much better as well as supportive and hardworking at the same time.

✓ Absolutely not, because the place where I'm studying right now is much better compared to other institutions, and the teachers and friends that we have found in that institution are very supportive and hardworking at the same time.

The phrase 'very much better as compared to' is awkward; 'much better compared to' is better. 'As well as' is incorrectly used to connect independent clauses; 'and' is appropriate. 'The friends that we found' should be 'the friends that we have found' to indicate current relevance.

× Right now I'm thinking of joining in medical courses because since childhood my 1 dream is to join myself in medical courses and to become a successful doctor and to help the disabled people as well.

✓ Right now I'm thinking of joining medical courses because since childhood my one dream has been to join medical courses and become a successful doctor and help disabled people as well.

The verb 'join' does not require the preposition 'in'. 'My 1 dream' should be 'my one dream'. 'To join myself in medical courses' is incorrect; reflexive pronoun 'myself' is unnecessary here. 'Has been' is better than 'is' to express a continuing past desire. 'The disabled people' should be 'disabled people' without 'the'.