Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn nên tập trung trực tiếp vào câu hỏi và tránh thông tin không liên quan như tuổi tác hoặc mong muốn của người nghe. Hãy trả lời ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và tự nhiên hơn.

例: I am currently a student at Norfolk High School.

提案: Bạn nên sử dụng câu rõ ràng, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và sắp xếp ý hợp lý. Nên dùng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc và cụ thể hơn về địa điểm và lý do học tập.

例: I usually study at school, but sometimes I study at home or with my health teacher because I want to improve my project and homework skills.

提案: Bạn nên tránh lặp từ và sử dụng từ vựng chính xác hơn. Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng, mạch lạc và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp để thể hiện ý tốt hơn.

例: Yes, it is a good place to study because it is very quiet and has beautiful views, which help me relax after studying.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp. Hãy trả lời trực tiếp, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh, có liên kết logic.

例: I wouldn't want to change the place because it is quiet and helps me concentrate well.

提案: Bạn nên trình bày kế hoạch học tập rõ ràng, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp. Câu trả lời nên có cấu trúc tốt và mạch lạc hơn.

例: My future study plan is to become a tour guide. I want to improve my communication skills and learn about history and geography to prepare for the job.

× Currently I am a student in Norfolk High School and today I am 16 years old and I hope you can do it.

✓ Currently, I am a student at Norfolk High School, and today I am 16 years old. I hope you can understand me.

The original sentence has awkward phrasing 'I hope you can do it' which is unclear. The correction clarifies the intended meaning. Also, 'in Norfolk High School' should be 'at Norfolk High School' (preposition correction, but since only grammar problems from the list are corrected, this is acceptable).

× I usually study in my schools or sometimes I study is my house or in my health teacher and I study it because I want to improve my skill of the project or in the homework.

✓ I usually study at my school, or sometimes I study at my house or with my health teacher, and I study because I want to improve my project skills or do my homework.

The original sentence has plural 'schools' which should be singular 'school' as the student likely refers to one school. Also, 'skill of the project' is corrected to 'project skills' to reflect plural skills. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× I usually study in my schools or sometimes I study is my house or in my health teacher and I study it because I want to improve my skill of the project or in the homework.

✓ I usually study at my school, or sometimes I study at my house or with my health teacher, and I study because I want to improve my project skills or do my homework.

The prepositions 'in my schools' and 'in my health teacher' are incorrect. The correct prepositions are 'at my school' and 'with my health teacher'.

× I usually study in my schools or sometimes I study is my house or in my health teacher and I study it because I want to improve my skill of the project or in the homework.

✓ I usually study at my school, or sometimes I study at my house or with my health teacher, and I study because I want to improve my project skills or do my homework.

The phrase 'I study is my house' is incorrect; 'is' should be omitted and replaced with 'at'. Also, 'I study it' is unnecessary and removed for clarity.

× So I think it is a time I can improve my person.

✓ So I think it is a time I can improve myself.

The pronoun 'my person' is incorrect; the reflexive pronoun 'myself' should be used to indicate self-improvement.

× Yes, well, I think this place is very good for me to study it because it's a very quiet place and very, very beautiful views.

✓ Yes, well, I think this place is very good for me to study because it's a very quiet place with very beautiful views.

The pronoun 'it' after 'study' is unnecessary and incorrect. Also, 'views' should be preceded by 'with' to connect properly.

× I can study and after I, I study house, I can look around them to relax my hair.

✓ I can study, and after I study at home, I can look around to relax my mind.

'I study house' is incorrect; it should be 'I study at home'. 'Look around them' is unclear; 'look around' suffices. 'Relax my hair' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'relax my mind'.

× Hmm, I got, I got, I got to say as a play I, it is not changed because it is very good for the other student ask me to study it.

✓ Hmm, I have to say as a place, it has not changed because it is very good for other students who ask me to study there.

'As a play' should be 'as a place'. 'It is not changed' should be 'it has not changed'. 'Other student ask me' should be 'other students who ask me'. 'Study it' should be 'study there'.

× Uh, it is very a quiet place and umm, make me study hard, uh, and uh, concentrate with the homeless and my.

✓ Uh, it is a very quiet place and it helps me study hard and concentrate without distractions.

'Very a quiet place' is incorrect; the correct order is 'a very quiet place'. 'Concentrate with the homeless and my' is unclear and likely a misstatement; corrected to 'concentrate without distractions'.

× My future to study plan a year to be a tour guide.

✓ My future study plan is to become a tour guide within a year.

The original sentence lacks proper verb forms and structure. 'To study plan a year to be' is incorrect; corrected to 'study plan is to become'.

× I study to to to study a communication skill and and a study about history as geography and play on the other words.

✓ I plan to study communication skills and subjects like history and geography, and also learn other things.

The original sentence has repeated words and incorrect verb forms. 'Study to to to study' is incorrect. 'Play on the other words' is unclear and corrected to 'learn other things'.

× And I think it is a time I can to study it because it's make me flexible and let's go in the job and I think I can do it.

✓ And I think this is the time I can study because it will make me flexible and ready for the job, and I think I can do it.

The sentence has incorrect verb forms and tense usage. 'Can to study' should be 'can study'. 'It's make me' should be 'it will make me'. 'Let's go in the job' is incorrect; corrected to 'ready for the job'.