Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时语言不够流畅，有重复且表达不自然。建议简洁明了地回答问题，避免重复，并使用更自然的表达方式。

例: I'm currently a junior student studying in Guangzhou, and I really enjoy my courses.

提案: 回答中有重复和语法错误，表达不够清晰。建议简洁明了地介绍学校位置和规模，避免重复。

例: I study at a university located in the suburbs of Guangzhou. It's a relatively large school.

提案: 回答中有很多语气词和重复，句子不完整。建议用连贯的句子描述环境，避免语气词，补充完整例子。

例: Yes, I think it's a great place to study because the environment is peaceful and beautiful. For example, there is a lake in the center of the campus that creates a relaxing atmosphere.

提案: 回答不完整且表达不流畅。建议完整表达想法，使用连贯句子，并具体说明希望增加的设施及其好处。

例: I would like the school to provide more professional exercise facilities, such as a well-equipped sports room and gym, which would encourage students to stay healthy and active.

提案: 回答不完整且有重复和语气词。建议用完整连贯的句子表达未来计划，避免重复和语气词。

例: In the future, I plan to study abroad to gain more professional knowledge and broaden my horizons, which will enrich my experience and skills.

× Enjoy really enjoying my courses at courses.

✓ I really enjoy my courses.

句子中“Enjoy really enjoying my courses at courses.”结构混乱，动词形式使用错误。应使用一般现在时表达习惯性动作，故改为“I really enjoy my courses.”。建议简化句子结构，避免重复和冗余。

× I'm starting in in an university in a university in Guangzhou.

✓ I'm studying at a university in Guangzhou.

“starting in in an university”中“starting”用法不当，且“in in”重复，冠词“an”用于辅音音素开头的单词前错误，应为“a university”。“study at a university”是正确搭配。建议使用正确的动词和介词搭配。

× Now this is this university is in the suburbs of Guangzhou and it's a relatively large, large school.

✓ Now, this university is in the suburbs of Guangzhou and it's a relatively large school.

句子中“relatively large, large school”重复使用形容词，造成冗余。应去掉重复的“large”。建议避免重复形容词。

× Yes uh, I think it is a really a great place to study umm, in terms of surroundings, uh, the place has a good, uh, and the peaceful and beautiful and environment.

✓ Yes, I think it is a really great place to study. In terms of surroundings, the place has a good, peaceful, and beautiful environment.

句子中“a good, uh, and the peaceful and beautiful and environment”结构混乱，连词使用不当，导致表达不清。应使用逗号分隔形容词，并去掉多余的“and”。建议理清句子结构，正确使用连词和标点。

× For example, there is a lake uh, in the center of the school, which.

✓ For example, there is a lake in the center of the school.

句子以“which”结尾，造成不完整句。应去掉“which”或补充完整。建议避免句子残缺。

× From my viewpoint, I want the school to equip a more professional exercise facilities such as a well equipped sports room and professional gym facilities which could help the which could encourage students to.

✓ From my viewpoint, I want the school to provide more professional exercise facilities, such as a well-equipped sports room and professional gym facilities, which could encourage students to exercise more.

“equip a more professional exercise facilities”中“a”与复数名词不匹配，且“equip”用法不当，应使用“provide”。句子后半部分不完整，需补充。建议注意量词和动词搭配，确保句子完整。

× In the future, I plan to study abroad to, uh, to get deeper to, to get more professional knowledge and, uh, broaden my horizons, umm, and uh, starting a board could, uh, enrich, could, could strengthen my.

✓ In the future, I plan to study abroad to gain deeper and more professional knowledge, broaden my horizons, and studying abroad could enrich and strengthen my experience.

句子中“starting a board”应为“studying abroad”，且句子结构混乱，表达不完整。应使用正确的动名词形式和完整句子。建议注意词汇拼写和句子完整性。