Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to answer directly and clearly, for example, state your current status and what you are doing now. Avoid unnecessary or confusing details.

例: I have recently finished my senior studies and now I am attending cooking classes to learn new skills.

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and has tense errors. Try to answer directly with correct tense and add a bit more detail to make it natural and informative.

例: I completed my studies last year at a public school in the Mokka district.

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant but could be improved by adding linking words and more specific details to support your opinion.

例: Definitely, because the school has a peaceful environment and all the teachers are very supportive, which helped me learn better.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contains unclear phrases. Try to express your opinion clearly and use appropriate vocabulary to explain why you would or would not like changes.

例: Honestly, I wouldn't want any changes because the school is well managed and provides everything students need.

提案: Your answer is understandable but could be improved by using correct grammar and more natural phrasing. Also, add a bit more detail about your plans.

例: I have recently finished my senior studies and have been admitted to a Bachelor of Commerce program to continue my education.

× Well the I have recently completed my seniors family study by catharsis team.

✓ Well, I have recently completed my senior family study with the Catharsis team.

The original sentence has a sentence structure error due to the misplaced article 'the' before 'I' and unclear phrasing. 'Seniors family study' should be 'senior family study' to be grammatically correct. Also, 'by catharsis team' should be 'with the Catharsis team' to correctly indicate collaboration. Adding a comma after 'Well' improves readability.

× Now I attended cooking classes.

✓ Now I am attending cooking classes.

The sentence uses the past tense 'attended' incorrectly when referring to a current ongoing activity. The present continuous tense 'am attending' is appropriate to indicate an action happening now.

× Actually I have completed my study but last year I study in public school district of Mokka.

✓ Actually, I have completed my studies but last year I studied in the public school district of Mokka.

The verb 'study' should be in the past tense 'studied' to correctly refer to an action completed last year. Also, 'study' should be plural 'studies' when referring to education in general. Adding commas improves sentence clarity.

× Definitely, because the environment of my school is very good and all teachers are very cooperative.

✓ Definitely, because the environment of my school is very good and all the teachers are very cooperative.

The phrase 'all teachers' requires the definite article 'the' before 'teachers' to specify the particular group of teachers at the school.

× Honestly speaking, not because all things are properly raised and the school was very steep and spare.

✓ Honestly speaking, no, because everything is properly maintained and the school is very neat and spacious.

The original sentence is unclear and contains incorrect word choices. 'Not' should be 'no' to answer the question negatively. 'All things are properly raised' is incorrect; 'properly maintained' is appropriate. 'Steep and spare' is incorrect; 'neat and spacious' better describes a school environment.

× I have recently completed my senior candidate study and now I got admission in BCOM for my highest studies.

✓ I have recently completed my senior candidate studies and now I have got admission in BCOM for my higher studies.

'Got' should be in the present perfect tense 'have got' to indicate a recent event connected to the present. 'Highest studies' is incorrect; 'higher studies' is the correct phrase. Also, 'study' should be plural 'studies'.