Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan struktur kalimat agar lebih natural dan efektif. Misalnya, gunakan 'I am self-employed' tanpa 'a' dan pisahkan ide menjadi kalimat yang lebih jelas. Hindari kalimat yang terlalu panjang dan tambahkan kata penghubung yang tepat.

例: I am currently self-employed and manage my own businesses, which gives me a lot of flexibility. Additionally, I plan to apply for a scholarship to pursue my master's degree to improve my skills and knowledge.

提案: Perbaiki kesalahan tata bahasa seperti 'make' menjadi 'makes' untuk subjek tunggal. Gunakan kata penghubung yang tepat untuk membuat kalimat lebih koheren dan tambahkan detail spesifik untuk memperkaya jawaban.

例: I plan to study in Taiwan because it is one of the most economically dynamic countries in Asia. Moreover, Taiwan is somewhat similar to Indonesia in terms of culture and lifestyle, which makes it easier for me to adapt.

提案: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan struktur kalimat agar lebih jelas dan natural. Gunakan kata kerja yang tepat dan susun kalimat dengan benar. Hindari kalimat terputus dan gunakan kata penghubung untuk kelancaran.

例: I believe it is a good place to study because the people in Taiwan are welcoming to international students. Additionally, I can practice Mandarin there, which will help me improve my language skills.

提案: Gunakan bahasa yang lebih formal dan hindari kata-kata seperti 'comfy'. Perbaiki struktur kalimat agar lebih jelas dan gunakan kata penghubung untuk menghubungkan ide.

例: I am not sure because I have not visited Taiwan yet. However, I assume the environment is comfortable since many Indonesian students choose to study there.

提案: Jawaban tidak fokus pada pertanyaan dan terdapat kalimat yang tidak relevan seperti tentang film. Perbaiki fokus jawaban dan tata bahasa, serta gunakan kalimat yang koheren dan relevan dengan rencana studi.

例: I plan to pursue a master's degree in industrial psychology next year. Additionally, I aim to gain practical experience through an internship to complement my academic knowledge.

× Right now I am a self-employed and manage my own businesses which gives me a lot of flexibility.

✓ Right now I am self-employed and manage my own businesses which give me a lot of flexibility.

The phrase 'a self-employed' is incorrect because 'self-employed' is an adjective, not a noun, so it should not have an article 'a'. Also, 'businesses' is plural, so the verb should be 'give' instead of 'gives' to agree in number.

× I also plan to apply for a scholarship to my masters degree to improve my skills and knowledge.

✓ I also plan to apply for a scholarship for my master's degree to improve my skills and knowledge.

The preposition 'to' is incorrect here; the correct preposition is 'for' when referring to applying for a scholarship. Also, 'masters degree' should be 'master's degree' with an apostrophe to indicate possession.

× Taiwan is somewhat similar to Indonesia in terms of culture and lifestyle, which make it easier for me to adapt.

✓ Taiwan is somewhat similar to Indonesia in terms of culture and lifestyle, which makes it easier for me to adapt.

The relative pronoun 'which' refers to the singular noun phrase 'Taiwan is somewhat similar...', so the verb should be singular 'makes' to agree with the singular subject.

× I believe it is because in Taiwan, the people there is welcome with international student and in there I can practice. Mandarin with.

✓ I believe it is because in Taiwan, the people there are welcoming to international students and there I can practice Mandarin.

The subject 'people' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is'. Also, 'welcome with' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'welcoming to'. 'International student' should be plural 'international students'. The sentence structure is corrected for clarity.

× I don't know because until now I haven't visited Taiwan yet, but I guess the environment there is comfy because a lot of Indonesian people want to study there.

✓ I don't know because until now I haven't visited Taiwan yet, but I guess the environment there is comfortable because a lot of Indonesian people want to study there.

The word 'comfy' is informal; 'comfortable' is more appropriate in this context as an adjective describing the environment.

× I plan to pursue a master degree in psychology industry next year.

✓ I plan to pursue a master's degree in industrial psychology next year.

'Master degree' should be 'master's degree' with an apostrophe. Also, 'psychology industry' is incorrect; the correct term is 'industrial psychology' or 'psychology industry' is not a standard phrase.

× This film fascinates me because it address critical issues like human versus AI.

✓ This film fascinates me because it addresses critical issues like human versus AI.

The subject 'it' is singular, so the verb should be 'addresses' with an 's' to agree in the third person singular.