Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，建议加强语法基础，避免拼写错误，并且回答时应更自然流畅，避免断断续续。可以先直接回答身份，再简要说明专业和兴趣。

例: I am a first-year student at South Central University in Wuhan, majoring in National Engineering. Although I was unfamiliar with this field at first, I have become interested because it combines technology and practical experience.

提案: 回答中有很多语法和词汇错误，表达不清晰，建议简化句子结构，使用简单准确的词汇，并且注意发音和拼写。回答时应直接说明学校和对城市的看法。

例: I study at South Central University in Wuhan. Although my entrance exam scores were not very high, I really like the city because it is rich in culture and has beautiful buildings.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不完整的问题，建议使用完整句子，避免断句，增加具体细节，如学术氛围和生活便利。

例: Yes, I think it is a good place to study. There are many universities, so the city has a strong academic atmosphere. Also, there are many parks and delicious food options.

提案: 回答不够清晰，表达含糊，建议明确指出想要改变的具体方面，并用连词连接句子，使表达更连贯。

例: Yes, I think some changes are needed. For example, many students choose majors they do not like just to pass exams. I hope the school can provide better guidance to help students select their true interests.

提案: 回答中有语法和拼写错误，表达不够流畅。建议使用正确的词汇和句型，清晰表达未来计划和兴趣。

例: I plan to continue my studies and pursue a master's degree. I want to gain more comprehensive professional knowledge and have time to consider my future career. I am interested in financial engineering because it offers good opportunities.

× You know my major is offend National Engineering.

✓ You know my major is often National Engineering.

这里's offend'是拼写错误，应为'often'，但根据上下文应为专业名称，可能是'Offend'误写，应确认专业名称。此处假设为拼写错误，改为'often'。

× but now I'm interested in because I got them both 3 or technology and practical experience.

✓ but now I'm interested because I got both theory and practical experience.

'interested in because I got them both 3 or technology and practical experience'结构混乱，'interested in'后应接名词或动名词，且'them both 3 or technology'无意义，改为'both theory and practical experience'更符合语境。

× You know my grade for university entrance examination was not satisfactory enough so I had no often.

✓ You know my grade for the university entrance examination was not satisfactory enough so I had no offer.

'had no often'应为'had no offer'，表示没有录取通知。此处拼写错误导致语义不清。

× But now I'm really love the city of hand.

✓ But now I really love the city of Handan.

'I'm really love'语法错误，应为'I really love'，且'city of hand'应为'city of Handan'，地名首字母大写。

× I think this is a hard to Rico and build for city.

✓ I think this is a hard-working and beautiful city.

原句词汇错误且无意义，推测想表达'勤劳和美丽的城市'，故改为'hard-working and beautiful city'。

× You know there are lot of university so they all have.

✓ You know there are lots of universities so they all have.

'lot'应为'lots'，'university'应为复数'universities'，表示多个大学。

× Academic atmosphere in overall city and there are lot of Wales and food.

✓ There is an academic atmosphere in the overall city and there are lots of walls and food.

句子缺少谓语，改为完整句子；'lot'改为'lots'；'Wales'应为'walls'或其他词，需根据语境确认。

× Well, I think the place should be changed. Their study errors, you know, in the final exam, there are a lot of people to choose the study area that they're not in love for all students.

✓ Well, I think the place should be changed. There are study errors, you know, in the final exam, many people choose study areas that they do not love.

'Their study errors'应为'There are study errors'；'to choose'改为'choose'；'that they're not in love for all students'语法错误，改为'that they do not love'。

× I think my school should be more.

✓ I think my school should improve more.

句子不完整，缺少谓语，补充动词'improve'使句子完整。

× Well, I will continue my studies, I'm going to pusher or master degree.

✓ Well, I will continue my studies; I'm going to pursue a master's degree.

'pusher'拼写错误，应为'pursue'；'master degree'应为'master's degree'，表示硕士学位。

× I hope to have more comprehensive professional knology and have time to think about my future career.

✓ I hope to have more comprehensive professional knowledge and have time to think about my future career.

'knology'拼写错误，应为'knowledge'。

× Also I will start in financial engineering because I think I'm really interested in it and they are higher.

✓ Also I will start in financial engineering because I think I'm really interested in it and the salary is higher.

'they are higher'语义不明，推测指薪水更高，改为'the salary is higher'。