Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答不够清晰，语法和表达存在错误，影响理解。建议简洁明了地回答问题，并注意语法正确。

例: I'm currently a college student studying music.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不准确，地名和学校名称不清楚。建议使用正确的语法，并提供具体且准确的地点描述。

例: I study at Mormon College in Tinder, which is a beautiful coastal city in China.

提案: 回答不连贯，句子不完整，表达不清晰。建议使用完整句子，逻辑连贯，并具体说明学习环境的优点。

例: Yes, it is a great place to study because it has excellent facilities like pianos and patient teachers who help me improve my music knowledge. Also, there is advanced technology that supports my learning.

提案: 表达不流畅且语法错误较多，建议简洁表达想法，并说明原因。

例: Yes, I would like more students and friends to join us in studying music because currently, only a few students choose music, so I sometimes feel lonely.

提案: 回答中断断续续，语法和表达不准确。建议用完整句子清晰表达未来计划，并使用连接词使内容连贯。

例: Firstly, I plan to get my undergraduate degree. Then, I want to do some practical work in an orchestra to learn more knowledge and skills.

× I'm currently a student agenda moment college and studying music.

✓ I'm currently a student at the moment, in college and studying music.

句中'student agenda moment college'结构混乱，缺少介词'at'，且'moment'应为短语'at the moment'，表示现在。需要将'student'和'college'分开，并加上介词。

× I'm a high school students in Mormon college Ann.

✓ I'm a high school student in Mormon College, Ann.

'students'应为单数'student'，因为主语是第一人称单数'I'，表示单个学生。

× It's located in Tinder which is a beautiful coastal cities in China.

✓ It's located in Tinder, which is a beautiful coastal city in China.

'cities'应为单数'city'，因为指的是单一的城市'Tinder'。

× Yeah, they are. Oh, vertical qualities. Piano and. Patient teachers to help me. Improve my music knowledge an.

✓ Yeah, it has excellent qualities: a piano and patient teachers to help me improve my music knowledge.

'they are'指代不明，应改为'it has'；'qualities'前应有形容词'excellent'；'piano'前不需要冠词；句子断裂需合并。

× Also there are some high technology helps me. Study.

✓ Also, there is some high technology that helps me study.

'high technology'作为不可数名词，谓语用单数'is'；'helps'后应接动词不定式或从句，需加'that'引导。

× Yeah, you could be.

✓ Yeah, I could be.

主语错误，'you'应为'I'，表示说话者自己的意愿。

× I want to more students in friends. Join us to study music because I was going only for.

✓ I want more students and friends to join us to study music because I am going alone.

'to more students in friends'结构错误，应为'more students and friends'；'was going only for'语义不清，改为'am going alone'更通顺。

× Students choose to study music, so I feel a little lonely.

✓ Only a few students choose to study music, so I feel a little lonely.

缺少限定词，'only a few students'更准确表达少数学生选择学音乐。

× Firstly, I need to. Get the undergraduation degrees, then I want to. Do some running test works in.

✓ Firstly, I need to get the undergraduate degree, then I want to do some internship work in.

'undergraduation degrees'错误，应为'singular undergraduate degree'；'running test works'表达不当，应为'internship work'或'practical work'。

× Orchestra I learn more knowledge and skills.

✓ In the orchestra, I will learn more knowledge and skills.

缺少介词'in'；'orchestra'前应加冠词'the'；句子缺少连接词，且时态应与计划相符用将来时。