Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is understandable but has grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use correct sentence structures and avoid redundancy. For example, say 'I am currently neither working nor studying because I have recently completed my bachelor's degree in Vietnam. Now, I am preparing to pursue my master's degree in Korea.'

例: I am currently neither working nor studying because I have recently completed my bachelor's degree in Vietnam. Now, I am preparing to pursue my master's degree in Korea.

提案: Your answer repeats information and has unclear phrases like 'pushing master degree'. Try to be clear and concise. For example, say 'I started my bachelor's degree at Golden Gate International College in Nepal. Currently, I am not studying or working as I am preparing for my master's degree in Korea.'

例: I started my bachelor's degree at Golden Gate International College in Nepal. Currently, I am not studying or working as I am preparing for my master's degree in Korea.

提案: Your answer has grammar mistakes and unclear sentences. Use linking words and complete sentences. For example, say 'Yes, it is a good place to study because it has some of the best teachers in the country. Moreover, the environment is supportive, and the students are among the top in Nepal.'

例: Yes, it is a good place to study because it has some of the best teachers in the country. Moreover, the environment is supportive, and the students are among the top in Nepal.

提案: Your answer is unclear and has many grammar errors. Try to organize your ideas clearly and use linking words. For example, say 'Yes, I would like to improve the study environment. The buildings should be more suitable and comfortable for students. Also, adding parks and recreational areas would benefit the students.'

例: Yes, I would like to improve the study environment. The buildings should be more suitable and comfortable for students. Also, adding parks and recreational areas would benefit the students.

提案: Your answer is fragmented and unclear. Try to give a clear and complete response with linking words. For example, say 'I am currently preparing to pursue my master's degree in Korea. After completing it, I plan to return to Nepal and open my own restaurant.'

例: I am currently preparing to pursue my master's degree in Korea. After completing it, I plan to return to Nepal and open my own restaurant.

× At the moment I'm neither is student or a worker.

✓ At the moment I'm neither a student nor a worker.

The conjunctions 'neither' and 'nor' should be used together to connect two negative alternatives correctly. Using 'or' after 'neither' is incorrect.

× I have recently completed my bachelors degree.

✓ I have recently completed my bachelor's degree.

The term 'bachelor's degree' requires a possessive apostrophe to indicate the degree belongs to a bachelor.

× In Vietnam and right now I'm preparing myself for the pursuing my master degree in Korea.

✓ In Vietnam, and right now I'm preparing myself to pursue my master's degree in Korea.

The phrase 'preparing myself for the pursuing' is incorrect; it should be 'preparing myself to pursue'. Also, 'master degree' should be 'master's degree'.

× I had started my bachelors in Golden Gate International College in Nepal and right now I'm neither studying or working.

✓ I started my bachelor's at Golden Gate International College in Nepal, and right now I'm neither studying nor working.

The past perfect 'had started' is unnecessary here; simple past 'started' is appropriate. Also, 'neither...or' should be 'neither...nor'.

× I'm just preparing myself for the. Pushing master degree in Korea.

✓ I'm just preparing myself for pursuing a master's degree in Korea.

The phrase 'for the. Pushing' is incorrect and fragmented; it should be 'for pursuing'. Also, 'master degree' should be 'master's degree'.

× Yes, it's good place for the study as it has.

✓ Yes, it's a good place to study as it has

The sentence is missing the indefinite article 'a' before 'good place' and 'for the study' should be 'to study'.

× One of the top teachers in the country an with a good environment and support from the teachers and each.

✓ One of the top teachers in the country, with a good environment and support from the teachers and staff.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear; 'each' is incorrect here. It should refer to 'staff' or 'everyone' for clarity.

× The student are one of the top students in the country.

✓ The students are some of the top students in the country.

'Student' should be plural 'students' to agree with the plural verb 'are'. Also, 'one of the top students' refers to singular, so 'students are some of the top students' is clearer.

× Is of course I would like to change some of the parts like the environment are the building itself as it has to be looked like the building an suitable for the students and with a great environment and comfort table.

✓ Of course, I would like to change some parts like the environment and the building itself, as it should look suitable for the students and have a great environment and be comfortable.

The original sentence has incorrect word order, wrong verb forms, and unclear phrasing. It needs restructuring for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× And this will be some park and the games for the student 2.

✓ Also, there should be some parks and games for the students.

'Student 2' is incorrect; it should be plural 'students'. 'This will be some park' is awkward; 'there should be some parks' is better.

× As. I'm preparing now for the master degree in Korea.

✓ As I'm preparing now for my master's degree in Korea,

The sentence is fragmented and incomplete; it should be connected to the next clause and 'master degree' corrected to 'master's degree'.

× My future plan is to complete my master degree in Korea in Yammer Jim and to return back in Nepal and do something and open some kind of restaurant in my own ******.

✓ My future plan is to complete my master's degree in Korea in Yammer Jim, return to Nepal, and open some kind of restaurant of my own.

'Master degree' should be 'master's degree'. 'Return back' is redundant; 'return' suffices. The sentence is long and needs commas for clarity.