Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ должен быть более структурированным и естественным. Избегайте повторений и неясных выражений. Начните с прямого ответа, затем добавьте конкретные причины выбора учебной области.

例: I am currently a student at a gymnasium where I focus on mathematics and languages. I chose this field because I am passionate about learning new languages and enjoy solving mathematical problems.

提案: Ответ должен быть более связным и логичным. Используйте связующие слова для плавного перехода между идеями и избегайте неясных слов.

例: I study at a gymnasium located in the city centre, which is very convenient for me. Moreover, the campus is modern, and the environment is conducive to concentration. Additionally, the people there are very helpful and supportive.

提案: Ответ должен быть более чётким и структурированным. Используйте связующие слова и конкретные детали, чтобы сделать ответ более информативным и естественным.

例: I believe my gymnasium is a great place to study because it provides access to computer labs, a library, and the Internet. This makes it convenient to focus on academic work and collaborate on group projects.

提案: Ответ должен быть более связным и избегать повторений. Начните с прямого ответа, затем объясните причину, используя связующие слова.

例: Actually, I would not like any changes because our study area was recently modernized. Therefore, it is already a convenient and comfortable place for me.

提案: Ответ должен быть более структурированным и естественным. Используйте связующие слова для логического изложения планов и избегайте ненужных пауз.

例: To be honest, I don't have immediate study plans yet. However, next year I will finish my studies at the gymnasium and plan to enter university. Currently, I am focused on my hobbies and school work while deciding on my future field of study.

× I choose chose this field because.

✓ I chose this field because.

The verb 'choose' is incorrectly used in the past tense context. The correct past tense form is 'chose'. Use 'chose' to indicate a completed action in the past.

× No, I study it and I zoom located in the city centre, which is very convenient for me.

✓ No, I study there and my school is located in the city centre, which is very convenient for me.

The phrase 'I zoom located' is incorrect. 'Zoom' is a verb unrelated to location. The correct expression is 'my school is located'. Also, 'study it' is unclear; 'study there' is more appropriate to indicate the place of study.

× Uh, the compass is modern and the environment in my gymnasium is conducive to concentrate.

✓ Uh, the campus is modern and the environment in my gymnasium is conducive to concentration.

'Compass' is a wrong word here; it should be 'campus'. Also, 'conducive to concentrate' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'conducive to concentration' because 'conducive to' is followed by a noun.

× People very helpful and supportive.

✓ People are very helpful and supportive.

The sentence lacks a verb. Adding the verb 'are' completes the sentence and makes it grammatically correct.

× It seems to me that my gymnasium is very good place to study because, uh, we have all access to the.

✓ It seems to me that my gymnasium is a very good place to study because, uh, we have full access to the.

The phrase 'very good place' needs an article 'a' before 'very good place'. Also, 'all access' is incorrect; 'full access' is the correct quantifier here.

× A computer labs to the library, Internet, the books, and it's very convenient place to study, to focus on your study, academic work, to do projects with the groups and uh.

✓ Computer labs, the library, the Internet, the books, and it's a very convenient place to study, to focus on your studies, academic work, and to do projects with groups.

'A computer labs' is incorrect because 'labs' is plural and should not have 'a'. Also, 'to do projects with the groups' should be 'to do projects with groups' without 'the'. 'Your study' should be 'your studies'.

× Actually no, because our studying area, uh. Was a modernized a recently and now it's a pretty good place to study and the modern enough for me a convenient and I think that.

✓ Actually no, because our studying area was modernized recently and now it's a pretty good place to study, modern enough for me, and convenient, I think.

The sentence has incorrect word order and unnecessary articles. 'Was a modernized a recently' should be 'was modernized recently'. Also, 'the modern enough for me a convenient' is incorrect; it should be 'modern enough for me and convenient'.

× I need to finish my study in my gymnasium and enter to the university.

✓ I need to finish my studies at my gymnasium and enter university.

The phrase 'enter to the university' is incorrect; the correct preposition is omitted: 'enter university' or 'enter the university'. Also, 'finish my study' should be 'finish my studies'.

× I need to choose my fields and now I'm focused on my hobbies and my school.

✓ I need to choose my field and now I'm focused on my hobbies and my school.

'Fields' should be singular 'field' when referring to a specific area of study. 'Choose my field' is the correct expression.