Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp khiến ý không được truyền đạt tự nhiên và hiệu quả. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi với câu chủ đề rõ ràng, tránh dùng những từ không phù hợp hoặc không đúng ngữ cảnh. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên ngắn gọn, không quá dài và tránh lặp từ.

例: I am currently a high school student in grade 12. This year is quite challenging because the workload has increased compared to last year. However, I try my best to stay productive and make the most of this important year.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn không rõ ràng và thiếu thông tin cụ thể. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, cung cấp thông tin rõ ràng về nơi bạn học và mô tả ngắn gọn về trường học. Tránh nói lắp hoặc dùng từ không đúng ngữ cảnh.

例: I study at a high school in Hung Yen province. The school has several modern buildings and a spacious campus, which makes it a comfortable place to learn.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có ý tốt nhưng bị ngắt quãng và có lỗi ngữ pháp, khiến ý không rõ ràng. Bạn nên sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh, dùng từ phù hợp và liên kết các ý với nhau để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, it is a great place to study because the environment is very quiet, which helps me concentrate better. Additionally, the school has good facilities that support our learning.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn không rõ nghĩa và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, nêu rõ những thay đổi bạn muốn và giải thích lý do. Sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp và câu hoàn chỉnh để truyền đạt ý hiệu quả.

例: Yes, although my school is a good place to study, I think it would be better if the facilities were improved, such as adding more modern classrooms and better sports equipment.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tốt với ý tưởng rõ ràng và câu chủ đề. Tuy nhiên, bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp và từ vựng để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn. Ngoài ra, bạn có thể thêm một vài chi tiết cụ thể để làm câu trả lời phong phú hơn.

例: In the future, I plan to become a teacher because I love working with children and want to help them learn. I enjoy the idea of guiding others and making a positive impact on their lives.

× Grit is a bit of a tarp here because the word Lord has increased a lot compared to the previous year.

✓ Grit is a bit of a trap here because the workload has increased a lot compared to the previous year.

The original sentence contains a singular and plural issue with 'word Lord' which seems to be a mishearing or typo for 'workload'. 'Workload' is singular and fits the context better. Also, 'tarp' is incorrect and should be 'trap'. This correction clarifies meaning and fixes singular/plural usage.

× Still, I do my best to manage productive and now vibrant school year.

✓ Still, I do my best to manage a productive and vibrant school year.

The phrase 'manage productive and now vibrant school year' is missing an article before 'productive' and 'now' is incorrectly used. 'Now' should be removed and 'a' added before 'productive' to correctly modify 'school year'. This fixes article usage and adjective placement.

× There has a. For buildings with a. A male. Regard and or. Uhm.

✓ There are four buildings with a male dormitory and other facilities.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. The correct structure for existence is 'There are' for plural 'buildings'. The sentence is reconstructed to convey intended meaning with proper 'there be' usage.

× Of course, it is really a wonderful place to study because the. Environment here, it's so quiet and now. PS4 so I can concentrate more better and now the facilities law here.

✓ Of course, it is really a wonderful place to study because the environment here is so quiet and peaceful, so I can concentrate better. Also, the facilities are good here.

The original sentence misuses 'the' before 'environment' and has unclear phrases like 'PS4' and 'facilities law'. Correcting article usage before 'environment' and clarifying the sentence improves grammar and meaning.

× Yes, older my score a really good place to study, but I think it is so wrong. More better if it improves Frank Sillitti.

✓ Yes, my school is a really good place to study, but I think it would be better if it improved the facilities.

The original sentence has incorrect article usage ('older my score'), wrong word choice ('wrong' instead of 'would be'), and unclear phrase 'Frank Sillitti'. Correcting articles and word choice clarifies the meaning.

× Well, in the future I plan to become a teacher because I really love children and want to teach and help them.

✓ Well, in the future I plan to become a teacher because I really love children and want to teach and help them.

This sentence is grammatically correct and fits the future tense context, so no correction is needed.

× I enjoy the idea of guarding others to learn in making a positive impact on their life.

✓ I enjoy the idea of guiding others to learn and making a positive impact on their lives.

The word 'guarding' is incorrect; it should be 'guiding'. Also, 'life' should be plural 'lives' when referring to multiple people. This corrects word choice and article usage.