Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to correct pronunciation and spelling errors, such as 'Taylors University' and 'Law of Torrid'. Also, make your answer more concise and natural by avoiding awkward phrases like 'the so close to our daily life'.

例: I am a first-year Bachelor of Law student at Taylor's University. My favorite subject is Tort Law because I find it fascinating how it relates closely to our daily lives.

提案: Avoid unclear or incorrect phrases like 'more than fast ladies'. Use clear and relevant vocabulary to explain your reasons. Also, correct grammar mistakes such as 'I do not regret for my choice' to 'I do not regret my choice'.

例: I study at Taylor's University in Subang Jaya. I chose this university because it offers excellent courses and supportive lecturers who enhance my learning experience. I am very happy with my choice.

提案: Improve sentence structure and grammar, for example, 'these supportive learning environment' should be 'this supportive learning environment'. Also, avoid unclear phrases like 'get to MIT friendly classmates'. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, it is a good place to study because of the supportive learning environment. For example, friendly classmates and helpful lecturers encourage me to overcome challenges and improve myself, which motivates me a lot.

提案: Correct grammar mistakes such as 'At is quiet' to 'It is quiet'. Use linking words like 'however' properly and make your suggestions clearer and more natural.

例: I don't think any changes are needed because I enjoy the quiet and comfortable study environment, which helps me concentrate. However, it would be great if there were more restaurants, as it gets very crowded during lunch breaks.

提案: Clarify your plans with correct grammar and vocabulary. Avoid confusing phrases like 'Bars close, should I go?' and 'After Advent'. Use linking words to organize your ideas logically.

例: I plan to transfer to the University of Leeds this September. After two years, I will take the bar exam, although I haven't decided which one yet. I need to figure that out later, but not right now.

× My favorite subject would definitely be Law of Torrid because I find it so fascinating to learn about the legal framework and the so close to our daily life.

✓ My favorite subject would definitely be Law of Tort because I find it so fascinating to learn about the legal framework and how close it is to our daily life.

The phrase 'the so close to our daily life' is grammatically incorrect and unclear. It should be corrected to 'how close it is to our daily life' to properly describe the relationship between the legal framework and daily life.

× The reason I chose this university is because it really offers excellent courses and more than fast ladies that really support my learning experience an I could say I do not regret for my choice.

✓ The reason I chose this university is because it really offers excellent courses and more than fast facilities that really support my learning experience and I could say I do not regret my choice.

The phrase 'more than fast ladies' is incorrect and likely a mishearing or typo. It should be 'more than fast facilities' to make sense. Also, 'an' should be 'and', and 'regret for my choice' should be 'regret my choice' as 'regret' does not require 'for' in this context.

× Yes, it is definitely a good place to study because of these supportive learning environment.

✓ Yes, it is definitely a good place to study because of this supportive learning environment.

The demonstrative pronoun 'these' is plural but 'environment' is singular. It should be 'this supportive learning environment' to agree in number.

× During your study, you get to MIT friendly classmates an helpful lecturers who encourage you to overcome challenges and become a better person version of yourself.

✓ During your study, you get to meet friendly classmates and helpful lecturers who encourage you to overcome challenges and become a better version of yourself.

'MIT' is incorrect and should be 'meet'. Also, 'an' should be 'and'. The phrase 'a better person version of yourself' is awkward; it should be 'a better version of yourself'.

× I don't think any changes are needed at the moment because I really enjoyed the current study environment.

✓ I don't think any changes are needed at the moment because I really enjoy the current study environment.

The verb tense should be present tense 'enjoy' to match 'don't think' and the current state being described.

× At is quiet and comfortable which helps me to concentrate better.

✓ It is quiet and comfortable which helps me to concentrate better.

'At' is incorrect here; the correct pronoun is 'It' referring to the place.

× However, if possible maybe at more restaurants there because it is so crowded during the break lunch.

✓ However, if possible, maybe more restaurants there because it is so crowded during lunch break.

The phrase 'at more restaurants there' is incorrect; it should be 'maybe more restaurants there'. Also, 'break lunch' should be 'lunch break'.

× I am planning to transfer to University of Lids this September and will be taking for a bar exams after two years but I haven't think of which.

✓ I am planning to transfer to University of Leeds this September and will be taking the bar exams after two years but I haven't thought of which ones yet.

'University of Lids' is likely 'University of Leeds'. 'Will be taking for a bar exams' is incorrect; it should be 'will be taking the bar exams'. 'I haven't think' should be 'I haven't thought'. Also, 'which' should be 'which ones' to refer to the exams.

× Bars close, should I go? So maybe that's what I should figure it out.

✓ Bar courses, should I go? So maybe that's what I should figure out.

'Bars close' is likely a mishearing of 'bar courses'. Also, 'figure it out' should be 'figure out' without 'it' after 'should'.

× After Advent of course, not now.

✓ After Advent, of course, not now.

The phrase 'After Advent of course' needs commas to separate the phrase 'of course' properly.