Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to respond directly and clearly, using correct grammar and vocabulary. Avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences. For example, clearly state your current status and achievements without confusing phrases.

例: I am a student studying commerce, and I recently completed my studies with an 89% score. I work hard and often study late at night to achieve my goals.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but has grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and correct grammar for clarity. Also, avoid redundancy and keep sentences concise.

例: I usually like to study in the library because the environment is comfortable and quiet. This helps me concentrate fully without any distractions.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains grammatical errors and sentence fragments. Use complete sentences and linking words to improve coherence. Also, try to vary your vocabulary and avoid repeating the same words.

例: Definitely, the library is a great place to study because it is comfortable and quiet. Moreover, it has plenty of books and resources, which help me gain extra knowledge.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical mistakes and incomplete sentences. Try to answer directly and clearly, using proper sentence structure and linking words. Avoid redundancy and ensure your ideas are fully expressed.

例: No, I am happy with the place where I study. Most of the time, I study in the library because it is quiet and has everything I need.

提案: Your answer is clear but has some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Use correct verb forms and linking words to improve fluency. Also, try to make your answer more concise and natural.

例: My future study plan is to go abroad to pursue higher education. After that, I plan to return to India and work as a business analyst in a multinational company.

× I am a student and I recently completed messiness in education in commerce stream and I got 89%.

✓ I am a student and I recently completed a messiness course in education in the commerce stream and I got 89%.

The sentence is mostly correct in tense but missing an article 'a' before 'messiness course'. Adding the article clarifies the noun phrase. The past tense 'completed' and 'got' are correctly used here.

× Moreover, I bond midnight oil for achieve my goal.

✓ Moreover, I burn the midnight oil to achieve my goal.

The phrase 'bond midnight oil' is incorrect. The correct idiom is 'burn the midnight oil'. Also, 'for achieve' should be 'to achieve' because 'to' is the correct preposition to indicate purpose.

× I usually like to study in the library becaused.

✓ I usually like to study in the library because.

The word 'becaused' is incorrect; the correct word is 'because' to introduce a reason.

× The environment of it is quite an comfort able and I can fully concentrate on my studies without any distraction.

✓ The environment is quite comfortable and I can fully concentrate on my studies without any distractions.

'Comfort able' should be 'comfortable' as one word. Also, 'any distraction' should be plural 'any distractions' to match the context.

× Definitely library is really good place for study becaused the environment is very comfortable and quiet.

✓ Definitely, the library is a really good place to study because the environment is very comfortable and quiet.

Missing article 'the' before 'library' and 'a' before 'really good place'. 'For study' should be 'to study'. 'Becaused' is incorrect; correct word is 'because'.

× Moreover, the library has plenty of books and resources. Which is very helpful for me to gain extra knowledge.

✓ Moreover, the library has plenty of books and resources, which are very helpful for me to gain extra knowledge.

The second sentence is a fragment starting with 'Which'. It should be connected to the previous sentence with a comma and 'which are' to form a complete sentence.

× No where I do study it is very perfect place for me and I do not make any changes.

✓ No matter where I study, it is a very perfect place for me and I do not want to make any changes.

'No where I do study' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'No matter where I study'. Also, 'very perfect' is redundant; 'perfect' alone suffices but 'very perfect' is commonly used informally. Added 'want to' before 'make any changes' for clarity.

× Most of the time I study in the library it is very quiet and.

✓ Most of the time, I study in the library; it is very quiet.

The sentence is a run-on and ends abruptly with 'and'. It should be split into two complete sentences or connected properly. Added a semicolon and removed 'and'.

× I have sufficient to this location.

✓ I have sufficient access to this location.

'Sufficient' needs a noun to modify. 'Sufficient to this location' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'sufficient access to this location'.

× My future study plans is I want to go to abroad for achieving higher education and after that I will come back to my home country in India and I want to work in multinational company as business analyst.

✓ My future study plans are to go abroad to achieve higher education, and after that, I will come back to my home country, India, and I want to work in a multinational company as a business analyst.

'Plans' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' not 'is'. 'Go to abroad' is incorrect; 'go abroad' is correct. 'For achieving' should be 'to achieve'. Added articles 'a' before 'multinational company' and 'a' before 'business analyst'. Added commas for clarity.