Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally relevant but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as "then it gives me a very perfect work life balance" and "it will be as it competitive salary." Try to use clearer and more natural expressions. Also, avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I'm currently working as a medical doctor, a profession I have found very fulfilling since I graduated five years ago. I enjoy my job because it offers a good work-life balance and helps me develop many professional skills. Additionally, the salary is competitive, which motivates me further.

提案: Your answer has several grammatical mistakes and unclear phrases, such as "I study as a Medical University" and "He has posted have so many are some of the best medical students." Please focus on clear sentence structure and correct word usage. Also, provide a direct answer with supporting details using linking words for coherence.

例: I studied at a medical university in Ukraine, which is very large and prestigious. Many of its graduates are among the best medical students and doctors worldwide.

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors, such as "the house is one of the best medical investors" and "could require it's interesting on developing." Try to express your ideas clearly and logically. Use linking words to connect your points and provide specific supporting details about the university's advantages.

例: Yes, it is a good place to study because it is one of the top medical institutions in the world. Moreover, it offers extra time for extracurricular activities, which helps students develop their interests. The campus is also surrounded by a picturesque landscape, making it a pleasant environment for learning.

提案: Your answer is difficult to understand due to unclear phrases like "Spanier winds across developing an AI modified softwares" and grammatical mistakes. Focus on expressing your ideas clearly and directly. Use linking words to organize your points and provide specific suggestions for improvement.

例: Yes, I would like my university to be more welcoming to international students. Also, I hope they invest more in developing AI-based software, as technology is advancing rapidly. Overall, I wish the university could be more accommodating to foreign students.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many errors, such as "if you chop my study plan" and "Great height St. ication so out once we rule." Please focus on clear and correct sentence structure. Provide a direct answer with supporting details and use linking words to make your response coherent.

例: My future study plans include obtaining a master's degree and an associate degree. I am very motivated to continue learning and aim to pursue a degree in public health to advance my career.

× I graduated five years ago and since then I found the medical practice very fulfilling and interesting.

✓ I graduated five years ago and since then I have found the medical practice very fulfilling and interesting.

The sentence requires the present perfect tense 'have found' to indicate an action that started in the past and continues to the present, rather than the simple past 'found'. This is because 'since then' refers to a period continuing up to now.

× I love my job because then it gives me a very perfect work life balance and also helps me improve so many professional skills and it will be as it competitive salary.

✓ I love my job because it gives me a perfect work-life balance and also helps me improve many professional skills and offers a competitive salary.

The phrase 'so many professional skills' is awkward; 'many professional skills' is more appropriate. 'Very perfect' is incorrect because 'perfect' is an absolute adjective and cannot be modified by 'very'. Also, 'it will be as it competitive salary' is incorrect and has been corrected to 'offers a competitive salary' for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I study as a Medical University in Ukraine, it's very big and prestigious university.

✓ I study at a Medical University in Ukraine; it's a very big and prestigious university.

The preposition 'at' is used to indicate attendance at an institution. Also, the article 'a' is needed before 'Medical University' and 'university' to be grammatically correct.

× He has posted have so many are some of the best medical students in the world and also medical doctors today.

✓ It has produced some of the best medical students in the world and also medical doctors today.

The pronoun 'He' is incorrect when referring to a university; 'It' is appropriate. The original sentence also contains unclear and incorrect phrases which have been corrected for clarity and grammar.

× Yes, it's a very good place to study because the house is one of the best medical investors in the world.

✓ Yes, it's a very good place to study because it is one of the best medical institutions in the world.

The word 'house' is incorrect in this context; 'it' refers to the university. Also, 'medical investors' is likely a misstatement; 'medical institutions' fits the context better.

× It's also gives an. Extra time for curricular activities which could require it's interesting on developing for students and also has a very picturesque landscape.

✓ It also gives extra time for curricular activities which are interesting for students' development and also has a very picturesque landscape.

The sentence had incorrect prepositions and awkward phrasing. 'Require it's interesting on developing' is incorrect; it has been corrected to 'are interesting for students' development' to convey the intended meaning clearly.

× Yes. I would want my university to be more receptive of him international students and so also Spanier winds across developing an AI modified softwares as the world has quickly moved on to new edges out also.

✓ Yes. I would want my university to be more receptive of international students and also to support developing AI-modified software as the world has quickly moved on to new technologies.

The pronoun 'him' is incorrect; it should be omitted or replaced with 'international students'. The phrase 'Spanier winds across' is unclear and likely a mishearing or misstatement; it has been corrected to 'support developing'. 'Softwares' is incorrect as 'software' is uncountable.

× I'm like them to be a little bit more accommodating to foreigners.

✓ I would like them to be a little bit more accommodating to foreigners.

The phrase 'I'm like them' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'I would like them' to express a desire or wish.

× But if you chop my study plan includes getting a masters degree and an associate degree.

✓ My study plan includes getting a master's degree and an associate degree.

The phrase 'But if you chop' is incorrect and unclear; it has been removed for clarity. Also, 'masters degree' should be 'master's degree' to show possession.

× I'm very interested in learning and motivated to keep climbing. Great height St. ication so out once we rule for the public health degree.

✓ I'm very interested in learning and motivated to keep climbing great heights, so I plan to pursue a public health degree.

The original sentence contains unclear and incorrect phrases. 'Great height St. ication so out once we rule' is nonsensical and has been corrected to a clear expression of ambition. Also, 'climbing great heights' is the correct idiom.