Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ должен быть более структурированным и естественным. Следует избегать лишних и непонятных деталей, а также использовать связные предложения. Например, начните с прямого ответа, затем добавьте краткую информацию о вашем учебном дне.

例: I am a student studying in the 10th grade at School Number One. I attend seven classes every day and usually wake up at 7:00 to prepare for school.

提案: Ответ должен быть более связным и логичным, избегая непонятных фраз. Используйте связующие слова для плавного перехода между предложениями и уточните детали, чтобы ответ был более информативным.

例: I study at School Number One, which is quite large with 24 classrooms. Our teachers are very kind, and I enjoy studying there because many students attend the school, around one hundred in total.

提案: Ответ должен быть более чётким и понятным. Избегайте непонятных слов и фраз, используйте связующие слова для логичности. Опишите конкретные причины, почему место хорошее для учёбы.

例: Yes, it is a good place to study because the environment is beautiful. Our teachers are very supportive and kind, which helps us learn reading, writing, and speaking effectively.

提案: Ответ должен быть более понятным и конкретным. Объясните, что именно вы хотите изменить и почему. Используйте правильные слова и грамматику для ясности.

例: Yes, I would like to build a gym in our school because it is small and currently we do not have a gym for physical activities.

提案: Ответ хороший, но требует улучшения грамматики и связности. Используйте правильные слова и структуру предложений, чтобы сделать ответ более естественным и плавным.

例: In the future, I want to be a doctor. I plan to study in Korea because it has excellent medical schools. It has been my childhood dream, and I want to make my parents proud by becoming a great doctor.

× I'm a student, I study at school night name license number one at 10 class. Eyes everyday study. 7. Classes. I woke up at 7:00.

✓ I'm a student. I study at school named License Number One in 10th grade. I study every day and have 7 classes. I wake up at 7:00.

The original sentence is fragmented and lacks proper sentence structure, making it difficult to understand. It needs to be divided into clear, complete sentences with correct word order and grammar to convey the intended meaning clearly.

× I study at school, Name of school is lesson #1.

✓ I study at a school called Lesson #1.

The phrase 'Name of school is lesson #1' is incorrect. The correct preposition and structure is 'a school called Lesson #1' to properly introduce the school's name.

× Our school is big and it has 24 classrooms. Our teachers are so kind. I like to study, say your Sarah, a lot of students. I think our. School has hundred students.

✓ Our school is big and has 24 classrooms. Our teachers are very kind. I like to study here. There are a lot of students. I think our school has a hundred students.

The original sentences have issues with plural forms and missing articles. 'Say your Sarah' is unclear and likely incorrect. 'Hundred students' needs the article 'a' before 'hundred'. Also, 'a lot of students' should be a separate sentence for clarity.

× Yes, it's very good place to study because it's very beautiful and they're we learn how to. Raw or eat half to write half seeing it's our teacher, very supportive and as a very kind, it's very good place to study.

✓ Yes, it's a very good place to study because it's very beautiful and there we learn how to read, write, and see. Our teacher is very supportive and kind. It's a very good place to study.

The original sentence misuses pronouns like 'they're' instead of 'there' and has unclear phrases like 'raw or eat half to write half seeing'. These need correction to proper pronouns and clearer expressions.

× Yes, I want to build a germ cell here becauses our school is not very big and we don't have a germ.

✓ Yes, I want to build a germ cell here because our school is not very big and we don't have a gym.

The word 'germ' is likely a misspelling of 'gym'. Also, 'becauses' should be 'because'. Correct prepositions and spelling are necessary for clarity.

× I in the future iPhone to be a doctor. I want to study at Korea. It's my childhood dream. I want to make my parents proud of me and I want to be a great doctor.

✓ In the future, I plan to be a doctor. I want to study in Korea. It's my childhood dream. I want to make my parents proud and be a great doctor.

The original sentence has a typo 'iPhone' instead of 'plan' or 'hope' and incorrect preposition 'at Korea' instead of 'in Korea'. Sentence structure needs correction for clarity and grammatical accuracy.