Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答不够自然且有语法错误，句子结构混乱。建议直接回答问题，避免重复提问，并使用完整正确的句子表达职业信息。

例: I work full-time as a sales director for a basketball company.

提案: 回答内容不清晰，语法和词汇错误较多，无法准确表达学习地点和专业。建议简洁明了地说明学校和专业名称。

例: I study at the University of Edinburgh, majoring in Mechanical Engineering.

提案: 回答较为自然，但表达不够流畅，部分语法错误。建议使用连接词使句子更连贯，并丰富细节描述。

例: Yes, I think it's a good place to study because my classmates are kind and smart. Moreover, many of them have a great sense of humor, which makes my university life enjoyable.

提案: 回答不清楚且语法错误严重，难以理解具体想表达的内容。建议明确指出希望改进的方面，并用完整句子表达。

例: I would like the university to improve the security on campus, especially after 11:00 PM, to make students feel safer.

提案: 回答内容混乱，语法和词汇错误较多，难以理解具体计划。建议简洁明了地表达未来学习计划和目的。

例: In the future, I plan to complete my studies at the University of Edinburgh. I also hope to make new friends and learn about the local culture.

× Are you a student? Actually I work full time fall. As sales director for our basketball company.

✓ Actually, I work full time as a sales director for our basketball company.

句子结构混乱，'fall'无意义且断句错误，应合并为一句完整句子。建议将句子合并并去除无关词汇，使表达清晰。

× Study well I agree to editor from who I am university. My measure is largest take engineer.

✓ I study at the university. My major is mechanical engineering.

句子结构混乱，词语顺序错误且用词不当。建议使用正确的句子结构和专业名称表达。

× Some of students how big sense of humor, so I enjoy my university time.

✓ Some of the students have a big sense of humor, so I enjoy my university time.

缺少定冠词'the'和动词'have'，导致句子不完整。建议加上定冠词和正确动词。

× I've like Don University to improve the Rose. On campus because they are not very self especially. After. 11:00 PM every night.

✓ I'd like Don University to improve the roads on campus because they are not very safe, especially after 11:00 PM every night.

错误使用'I've like'应为'I’d like'，'Rose'应为'roads'，'self'应为'safe'，句子断裂。建议使用正确的词汇和连贯句子。

× In my future I plan to finish are the calls in the University of Edinburgh's after Dior and study. I prefer to make some new friends and talk and where there is some. Local home. Science too. Understand the local culture.

✓ In the future, I plan to finish my courses at the University of Edinburgh and study there. I want to make some new friends, talk with locals, and understand the local culture.

句子结构混乱，词语错误，断句不当。建议重组句子，使用正确词汇表达清晰意思。