Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to give a clear and direct answer first, then add brief supporting details. Avoid hesitations and unclear phrases. Use simple and correct grammar to express your current status clearly.

例: I am currently a student because I am pursuing my master's degree. Although I have graduated with my bachelor's, I still consider myself a student now.

提案: Make sure to pronounce the university's name clearly and use complete sentences. Provide clear information about your faculty and degrees without repetition.

例: I study at Penny Swift University in the Faculty of Economics and Political Science. I completed both my bachelor's and master's degrees there.

提案: Avoid unclear place names and hesitations. Give a clear opinion and explain your reasons logically using linking words. Use correct place names and grammar.

例: I don't think it is a very good place to study because it is far from my hometown, Mania. However, I chose it because it is the closest university to where I live.

提案: Be clear and specific about the changes you want. Use correct vocabulary and grammar. Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences.

例: Yes, I would like them to update the decoration of the university and improve the scheduling so that classes are more organized and punctual.

提案: Speak clearly and use correct terms like 'PhD'. Provide a complete and coherent answer with linking words to explain your plans.

例: I plan to finish my master's degree soon, and then I want to go abroad to pursue a PhD in another country.

× I consider to be year graduate person but now I'm pursuing my masters degree so.

✓ I consider myself a graduate this year but now I'm pursuing my master's degree.

The verb 'consider' should be followed by an object and a noun or adjective, not 'to be'. Also, 'year graduate person' is incorrect; it should be 'a graduate this year'. 'Masters degree' needs a possessive apostrophe as 'master's degree'.

× It could, uh, be, or I can scribe myself as a student.

✓ It could be, or I can describe myself as a student.

'Scribe' is incorrect here; the correct verb is 'describe'. Also, 'I can describe myself as a student' is the correct phrase to express self-identification.

× But now I'm graduated, there's.

✓ But now I've graduated.

'I'm graduated' is incorrect; the correct form is 'I've graduated' (present perfect). Also, 'there's' is incomplete and unnecessary here.

× I study in a penny swift university.

✓ I study at Penny Swift University.

'Study' is followed by 'at' when referring to an institution. Also, proper nouns like university names should be capitalized and not preceded by 'a' if they are specific names.

× Even a faculty of economics and political science.

✓ I am in the Faculty of Economics and Political Science.

The sentence lacks a subject and verb. 'Even a faculty' is incorrect; it should specify the faculty as part of the university and use proper capitalization.

× And that's that is my university of my masters degree and the same university of my bachelor degree.

✓ That is the university where I am pursuing my master's degree and where I completed my bachelor's degree.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. It needs restructuring for clarity and correct possessive forms.

× No, I don't think it is, but uh, I go there because it is the nearest faculty of my hometown.

✓ No, I don't think it is, but I go there because it is the nearest university to my hometown.

'Faculty' refers to a department, not a place to study generally. Also, 'nearest faculty of my hometown' is incorrect; it should be 'nearest university to my hometown'.

× My hometown is mania and Venice wave close to mania.

✓ My hometown is Mania, and Venice Wave is close to Mania.

Proper nouns should be capitalized. Also, the sentence needs a verb to connect the two parts properly.

× So I choose Venezuela for that reason, but I don't have it feel happy there.

✓ So I chose Venezuela for that reason, but I don't feel happy there.

'Choose' should be in past tense 'chose' to match the context. 'I don't have it feel happy' is incorrect; it should be 'I don't feel happy'.

× Yes, I think as they can make a lot of changes like.

✓ Yes, I think they can make a lot of changes like...

The word 'as' is unnecessary and incorrect here. The sentence should flow directly with 'I think they can...'. Also, the sentence is incomplete and needs continuation.

× Updating the decoration or be a more committed commitment committed committing in our schedule.

✓ Updating the decoration or being more committed to our schedule.

The phrase 'be a more committed commitment committed committing' is incorrect and redundant. The correct form is 'being more committed to our schedule'.

× I'm seeking to end my masters degree and.

✓ I'm trying to finish my master's degree and...

'Seeking to end' is awkward; 'trying to finish' is more natural. Also, 'masters degree' needs possessive apostrophe.

× I want to go outside Egypt to. Takes pH DA. From any other country.

✓ I want to go outside Egypt to take a PhD from another country.

'Takes' should be 'take' to match the infinitive form after 'to'. 'pH DA' is a misspelling of 'PhD'. 'From any other country' is better as 'from another country'.