Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中有语法错误，如“post graduated student”应为“postgraduate student”，且表达不够简洁自然。建议简化句子结构，避免冗余，同时注意时态和冠词的使用。

例: I am currently a postgraduate student studying basic medical sciences at university. I work hard every day to gain knowledge and build a better future.

提案: 回答中出现了明显的错误，如“UN study”应为“I study”，且大学名称可能有误。建议准确表达学校名称，避免拼写错误，并补充更多细节使回答更完整。

例: I study at Sun Yat-sen University, which is located in Guangzhou. It is a well-known university in China.

提案: 回答中存在语法和表达不清的问题，如“in my college and there”不明确。建议使用连贯的句子，增加具体细节，并使用连接词使表达更流畅。

例: Yes, it is a good place to study because it has many experienced teachers and excellent facilities. Moreover, the college is famous in China, so many students aspire to enroll.

提案: 回答表达混乱，语法错误多，信息不清晰。建议理清思路，使用完整句子表达具体的改进建议，并避免语法错误。

例: Yes, I think the university could improve by building a rest area for students in the hospital where we do experiments, so we can relax during breaks.

提案: 回答中有拼写错误和断句不当，如“sharing university”、“broaden my horrible”。建议使用正确词汇，连贯表达未来计划，并补充具体理由。

例: In the future, I hope to study abroad at a university in Europe because it will help me improve my knowledge and broaden my horizons. Additionally, I want to experience a different education system.

× I'm currently a post graduated student and I am starting the basic sciences of medicine in university.

✓ I'm currently a postgraduate student and I am starting the basic science of medicine at university.

“post graduated student”应为“postgraduate student”，表示研究生；“basic sciences”应为“basic science”，因为这里指的是医学基础科学的整体学科。

× I'm currently a post graduated student and I am starting the basic sciences of medicine in university.

✓ I'm currently a postgraduate student and I am starting the basic science of medicine at university.

“in university”应改为“at university”，表示在大学学习。

× I work hard everyday and try my best to gain more knowledge and build a better future.

✓ I work hard every day and try my best to gain more knowledge and build a better future.

“everyday”是形容词，表示“日常的”，此处应使用副词短语“every day”，表示“每天”。

× UN study in Sonia Said University, which is located in Guangzhou.

✓ I study at Sonia Said University, which is located in Guangzhou.

句子缺少主语，应为“I study”；“UN”应为“I”；“study in”应为“study at”，表示在某大学学习。

× UN study in Sonia Said University, which is located in Guangzhou.

✓ I study at Sonia Said University, which is located in Guangzhou.

“study in”应改为“study at”，表示在某大学学习。

× There are many teachers and facilities in my college and there.

✓ There are many teachers and facilities in my college.

“and there”多余且不合适，应删除。

× The college is also famous in China. So many students are trying to get in.

✓ The college is also famous in China, so many students are trying to get in.

句子应合并为一句，使用逗号连接，避免断句错误。

× Yes, I think it can make more changes.

✓ Yes, I think it can make some changes.

“make more changes”表达不自然，通常说“make some changes”，表示做出一些改变。

× Are measuring the basic sciences of medicine and the I always do experiments in the hospital, I think.

✓ We are studying the basic sciences of medicine, and I always do experiments in the hospital, I think.

句子结构混乱，缺少主语，应为“We are studying...”，并且“Are measuring”用词不当，应改为“are studying”。

× The hospital can build a restroom for students to have a rest in the.

✓ The hospital can build a restroom for students to rest in.

“have a rest in the”结构不完整且冗余，应简化为“rest in”。

× In the future, I hope to study abroad in Europe, sharing university 'cause it will help me improve my knowledge level and broaden my horrible.

✓ In the future, I hope to study abroad in Europe, at a sharing university, because it will help me improve my knowledge level and broaden my horizon.

“sharing university”表达不清，应为“a sharing university”或具体名称；“'cause”应为“because”；“broaden my horrible”应为“broaden my horizon”，拼写错误且词义错误。

× Besides. I can experience. Different education system too.

✓ Besides, I can experience different education systems too.

句子断裂，应合并为一句，且“system”应为复数“systems”，表示不同的教育体系。