School— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Сформулируйте ответ чётко и логично: сначала укажите местоположение, затем добавьте 1–2 конкретных деталей. Избегайте лишних или непонятных фраз (например, «my home is closed» и «I work day every day» звучат неуместно). Используйте связки (for example, also) и корректную грамматику (there are/it is).

例: My school is in the centre of Bukhara, near the Bukhara shopping centre. It is surrounded by several new apartment buildings, so the area is quite busy and convenient for students. Also, there is a large bus stop nearby, which makes it easy to get to school.

提案: Сосредоточьтесь на ясном главном предложении и конкретных причинах. Избегайте повторов («learn learning», «read, writing») и местоимений без ясного референта («they have my childhood memories» звучит неправильно). Дайте 1–2 конкретных примера (учителя, мероприятия, друзья).

例: Yes, I really like my school because it holds many of my childhood memories and I have close friends there. For example, my English teacher helped me improve my writing and reading skills, and we often take part in school clubs that make learning enjoyable.

提案: Дайте прямой ответ и затем подкрепите его конкретными деталями. Убедитесь в грамматике и избегайте повторов («you you», «classes, the classes too»). Используйте связки (because, for example, therefore) и опишите, как именно окружающая среда помогает учёбе.

例: Yes, I think it is a good place to study because the campus has many trees and large gardens, which create a calm atmosphere. For example, the classrooms are bright and comfortable, so students can concentrate better during lessons.

提案: Формулируйте предложение грамматически правильно и структурированно: тема + поддержка. Избегайте общих и расплывчатых слов («very, very beautiful»). Дайте конкретные примеры взаимодействия (групповые проекты, поддержка учителей).

例: The environment at my school is very positive because the teachers are kind and the students are friendly. For example, teachers often organise group projects and offer extra help after class, which encourages cooperation and learning.

提案: Дайте ясный и полный ответ: начните с утверждения, затем объясните причину и приведите пример или следствие. Избегайте неясных фраз («it will flow»). Используйте слова причинно-следственной связи (because, so, therefore).

例: Interest in study is very important because when a child is interested, they are more motivated to learn and practise. For example, a motivated student is more likely to do extra reading and improve skills, which can lead to better opportunities in the future.

× My school is in the center of Bukhara near the Bukhara shopping center.

✓ My school is in the center of Bukhara, near the Bukhara shopping center.

The sentence needed a comma for clarity, but grammar is correct; no preposition change required. Use a comma to separate coordinate location phrases. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× My home is closed, that's why I work day every day.

✓ My home is close, that's why I walk every day.

The student used 'closed' (meaning not open) instead of 'close' (near) and 'work day' instead of 'walk'. These are word choice errors. Replace 'closed' with 'close' to express proximity and 'work day every day' with 'walk every day' to express the action. Suggestions: check word meaning in a dictionary and choose verbs that match context. Grammar problem type ID: 5

× Uh around my school have more new apartment buildings.

✓ There are many new apartment buildings around my school.

Original lacks a subject and correct word order. English requires 'There are' for stating existence of plural nouns. Use 'many' instead of 'more' when not comparing. Suggestion: use 'There is/are' + determiner + noun for describing existence. Grammar problem type ID: 26},{

× Yes, I really like my school because they have my childhood memories, they have my best friends and who helped me learn learning and learn to write, read, writing and so on.

✓ Yes, I really like my school because I have childhood memories there, I made my best friends there, and teachers helped me learn to read and write.

Wrong pronoun 'they' used for 'school' and awkward clause 'who helped me learn learning'. Use 'I' and refer to 'teachers' for people who helped. Simplify 'learn learning and learn to write, read, writing' to 'learn to read and write'. Suggestion: refer to institutions with 'it' or use 'school' as place and 'teachers' for people. Grammar problem type ID: 12

× I think yes, because when you come my school, you can see everywhere, a lot of trees, big gardens.

✓ I think so, because when you come to my school, you can see many trees and large gardens everywhere.

Missing preposition 'to' and awkward quantifier/order. 'Everywhere' placement was incorrect and 'a lot of trees, big gardens' needs connectors and quantifier 'many'. Use 'large' instead of 'big' for style. Suggestion: include required prepositions and place adverbial phrases correctly. Grammar problem type ID: 27

× It's a very beautiful when you you see the classes, the classes too, very comfortable for for children.

✓ It's very beautiful when you see the classrooms; the classrooms are also very comfortable for children.

Extra article 'a' before 'very beautiful' is incorrect. Duplicate words and missing verb in second clause. Place 'very' before adjective and include verb 'are'. Remove duplicates. Suggestion: avoid fillers and check sentence components (subject, verb, object). Grammar problem type ID: 20

× The environment at my school is a good I think because the teachers are very kind, students are friendly, communicated with others, atmosphere is very, very beautiful.

✓ The environment at my school is good, I think, because the teachers are very kind, the students are friendly and communicate with others; the atmosphere is very beautiful.

Unnecessary 'a' before 'good' and missing articles before 'students'. Incorrect verb form 'communicated' should be present 'communicate' to match tense. Punctuation needed. Suggestion: use consistent present tense when describing general facts and include appropriate articles. Grammar problem type ID: 22

× While interest is important because if a child is interested, it will flow and great paths will open up in the future.

✓ Interest is important because if a child is interested, learning will be smooth and many opportunities will open up in the future.

Awkward phrasing 'it will flow' unclear; replace with 'learning will be smooth' and 'great paths' with 'many opportunities'. Ensure subject is clear. Suggestion: use precise vocabulary to express abstract ideas and keep tense consistent. Grammar problem type ID: 7