School— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cần trả lời trực tiếp, mạch lạc và ngắn gọn: nêu tên trường và vị trí chính xác. Tránh lặp từ và lỗi ngữ pháp; sắp xếp câu theo cấu trúc chủ đề + chi tiết bổ sung. Ví dụ: "My school is Huabang High School, located near X street/in the center of the city."

例: My school is Huabang High School, which is located on Dong Street near the city center.

提案: Cần trả lời rõ ràng (Yes/No) rồi giải thích lý do bằng câu ngắn gọn, dùng liên từ để nối ý. Tránh lặp từ và dùng tính từ phù hợp (e.g., small, crowded, noisy). Cố gắng cung cấp một ví dụ cụ thể hoặc phần cải thiện.

例: No, I don't like my school very much because it is quite small and often overcrowded, especially in summer when the classrooms become noisy.

提案: Cần đưa câu chủ đề rõ ràng và giải thích cụ thể bằng các lý do dễ hiểu (ví dụ: thiếu cơ sở vật chất, giáo viên, tài liệu). Dùng liên từ như 'because' hoặc 'because of' và tránh cấu trúc ngữ pháp sai (e.g., 'it doesn't offer').

例: No, I don't think it is a good place to study because it doesn't offer a supportive learning environment, lacks quality resources and up-to-date materials.

提案: Cần mô tả môi trường rõ ràng, dùng tính từ phù hợp và cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể. Sử dụng liên từ để nối ý (for example, therefore). Tránh dùng cấu trúc sai hoặc từ không đúng (ví dụ 'no friendly' nên là 'not friendly').

例: The environment at my school is not very friendly; classrooms are bare and not decorated, so they do not encourage student participation or group work.

提案: Cần trả lời trực tiếp (Interest is very important) và giải thích rõ vì sao bằng lí do logic (motivation, persistence, better results). Tránh lặp từ và dùng cụm từ chính xác (e.g., 'interest provides motivation' và 'helps students succeed').

例: Interest in studying is extremely important because it provides motivation and helps students put in consistent effort, which leads to better results in the long run.

× My school is Huabang High school is is is in on a doing St. ask company.

✓ My school is Huabang High School, which is on Doing Street near Ask Company.

The original sentence has repeated words and incorrect word order causing a sentence structure error. Correct by removing repetitions, capitalizing proper nouns, and using a relative clause and correct preposition 'on' for a street; place commas to separate clauses.

× MMM of score, but I don't like my school because it's it's rather than small and crowded.

✓ I'm okay with the scores, but I don't like my school because it's rather small and crowded.

The phrase 'rather than small' is incorrect for making a simple adjective description; this is a comparative/superlative misuse. Use 'rather small' to indicate degree. Also remove repeated 'it's' and provide a clear subject 'I'm'.

× Crowded student in the summer is very noisy.

✓ The crowded students in the summer are very noisy.

Original has incorrect noun phrase order and wrong subject-verb agreement. Use plural 'students' and plural verb 'are'; place 'crowded' as adjective before 'students' and time phrase 'in the summer' after the noun phrase.

× No, I believe my school is not good place to study because it's not offer a supportive learning environment with well quality, qualifies picture and a range of research.

✓ No, I believe my school is not a good place to study because it does not offer a supportive learning environment with good quality facilities and a range of resources for research.

Multiple errors: missing article 'a' before 'good place', incorrect verb form 'not offer' (needs auxiliary 'does not offer'), wrong adjective usage 'well quality' should be 'good quality', 'qualifies picture' is incorrect — likely 'quality facilities' or 'qualified teachers', and 'range of research' should be 'a range of resources for research'. Corrections fix article use, verb support, adjective choice, and noun phrases.

× Oh, the environment at my school is no friendly and bad with picture.

✓ Oh, the environment at my school is not friendly and is poor in appearance.

'No friendly' is incorrect; use 'not friendly'. 'Bad with picture' is unclear; replace with 'poor in appearance' or 'unpleasant'. Also add the verb 'is' before the second adjective for clarity.

× Who not encourage active participation and collaboration among students, For example classroom and not Wellness and decorated with student project.

✓ It does not encourage active participation and collaboration among students. For example, the classrooms are not well organized or decorated with student projects.

Original fragments lack a clear subject and verb and contain incorrect words ('Who not encourage', 'not Wellness'). Replace 'Who' with 'It' (referring to the school), add 'does not encourage', and rephrase the example as a complete sentence. Use 'well organized' and 'decorated with student projects'.

× Ah, interested in studying in studying extremely important because it's fair motivation and certain effort when when students are generally careers, they amended small with the.

✓ Ah, being interested in studying is extremely important because it provides motivation and leads to consistent effort when students pursue their careers.

This sentence has pronoun and gerund errors and nonsensical fragments. Use the gerund 'being interested' as the subject, 'it provides' as the pronoun reference, and 'consistent effort' for clarity. Remove repeated words and unclear clause 'they amended small with the'. Make the purpose 'when students pursue their careers'.