School— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and remove filler words (uh, especially). Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Also correct small grammar issues (e.g., "options" plural, "a metro station").

例: My school is in the centre of Ankara. It is easy to reach from my house because there are several public transport options, and a metro station is very close.

提案: Avoid repetition and use clearer structure: give a direct opinion, support it with one or two specific reasons, then add a brief concluding comment. Correct grammar (e.g., "teachers' expectations", "top thousand").

例: I don't really like my school because the workload is very heavy and teachers' expectations are extremely high. I was among the top thousand students in the national exam, so teachers assume a lot from us, which can be stressful, although it also helps students improve.

提案: Give a clearer topic sentence and use linking words (for example, "because" and "therefore"). Be specific about how being with similar students helps (study groups, motivation). Remove vague phrases like "consider about your level".

例: Yes, I think it is a good place to study because many classmates are studying the same subjects; therefore we can form study groups and compare our progress, which motivates me to improve.

提案: Complete the answer with a clear topic sentence and a finished supporting detail. Use specific examples of the environment (e.g., protests, student meetings) and a linking word to explain the effect on studying. Avoid trailing sentences.

例: The environment is not very peaceful because the school has a reputation for political activity; for example, student groups frequently organize demonstrations and meetings, which can be distracting for classes.

提案: Start with a clear opinion, then give one specific reason and an example. Correct phrasing (e.g., "tend to pay more attention" and "if you don't like your field of study"). Keep sentences concise.

例: Interest is very important because when you enjoy a subject you tend to pay more attention and study longer; for instance, I study more consistently when I'm interested in a topic, and my grades improve as a result.

× it is quite easy to get there from my house because there are some public transport option for me.

✓ it is quite easy to get there from my house because there are some public transport options for me.

Incorrect use of plural form with 'option'. This is a countable noun and must match the plural verb 'are'. Use 'options' to agree with 'are' and convey multiple transport choices. Suggestion: use 'some public transport options' or 'public transport available'.

× Especially, uh, metro station is really near to my house.

✓ Especially, the metro station is really near my house.

Incorrect use/missing definite article. 'metro station' refers to a specific station near the speaker, so it requires the definite article 'the'. Also 'near to' is less natural here; 'near' without 'to' is preferred. Suggestion: use 'the metro station is really near my house'.

× Actually, I don't like my school too much, uh, because it's a really hard school, uh, and it was hard to get into that school.

✓ Actually, I don't like my school very much because it's a really competitive school, and it was hard to get into.

Incorrect adverb choice 'too much' is acceptable colloquially but 'very much' is more natural here. Also 'hard school' is awkward; choose 'competitive' or 'strict' depending on meaning. Repetition 'that school' is unnecessary after mentioning 'my school'. Suggestion: replace 'too much' with 'very much' and simplify 'into that school' to 'into'.

× so our teachers expectations are really, really, uh, high from us.

✓ so our teachers' expectations of us are really, really high.

Subject-verb agreement and possessive error: 'teachers expectations' needs a possessive apostrophe 'teachers'' to show expectations belong to teachers. Also preposition choice: 'high from us' is incorrect; use 'expectations of us' or 'teachers expect a lot from us'. Suggestion: say 'our teachers' expectations of us are high' or 'our teachers expect a lot from us'.

× Uh, but maybe it's a good thing for.

✓ Uh, but maybe it's a good thing.

Sentence fragment and article error: 'for' at the end makes the sentence incomplete and ungrammatical. Removing 'for' completes the thought. Suggestion: finish the clause if needed ('for our future') or omit 'for'.

× I think it's a good thing to study, uh, because you will be around with the other students who are studying at the same things with you.

✓ I think it's a good environment for studying because you will be around other students who are studying the same things as you.

Incorrect preposition and phrasing: 'good thing to study' is awkward; 'good environment for studying' fits better. 'around with' is incorrect — use 'around' without 'with'. 'studying at the same things with you' is ungrammatical; use 'studying the same things as you.' Suggestion: use 'around other students' and 'studying the same things as you'.

× So it will help to understand others level and, uh, you can consider about your level, uh, so.

✓ So it will help you understand others' levels, and you can reflect on your own level.

Incorrect use of prepositions and possessive: 'understand others level' needs a possessive apostrophe 'others'' and 'level' should be plural if referring to multiple people. 'consider about your level' is incorrect; use 'reflect on your level' or 'consider your level.' Also remove unnecessary filler 'so'. Suggestion: 'help you understand others' levels' and 'reflect on your own level'.

× Uh, I can't say it's a peaceful environment because our school has a reputation with, uh, political issues.

✓ Uh, I can't say it's a peaceful environment because our school has a reputation for political issues.

Incorrect use of preposition: 'reputation with' is incorrect; use 'reputation for' to indicate the reason a reputation exists. Suggestion: 'reputation for political issues'.

× Uh, so there are some activist students, uh, they are regularly, uh, making.

✓ Uh, so there are some activist students; they are regularly protesting.

Sentence without a verb / incomplete sentence: 'they are regularly, uh, making' is incomplete and lacks an object. Supply a verb and object that make sense in context, e.g., 'protesting' or 'organizing demonstrations.' Suggestion: complete the sentence with 'protesting' or 'organizing demonstrations'.

× How important is interest in study?

✓ How important is interest in studying?

Incorrect verb + noun form after 'interest in'. Use the gerund 'studying' after the preposition 'in' to express the activity. Suggestion: 'interest in studying'.

× I believe it's definitely important because if you like what you study, you will tend to more put more attention to get a good result in your exams if you don't like your fields about your study.

✓ I believe it's definitely important because if you like what you study, you will tend to pay more attention and get better results in your exams; if you don't like your field of study, you won't perform as well.

Multiple tense, word order and preposition issues: 'tend to more put more attention' is incorrect order — use 'tend to pay more attention'. 'to get a good result' is awkward; 'get better results' is better. 'fields about your study' is ungrammatical; use 'field of study.' Also sentence run-on; split into two clauses for clarity. Suggestion: 'tend to pay more attention', 'get better results', and 'field of study'.